This is really good! The rhyming had a very natural flow and wasn't forced. Amazing job mate.

That was superb. Why the hell hasn't it got more reviews?

WOW

I wish I could write poems that good.

This is incredibly beautiful and tragic. I was blown away by your writing, but this is definitely my favorite piece of work by you. I cannot choose a favorite part at all...every line is amazing. Please, write more gems like these.

On another note, my sister LeaveMeLonely is a huge fan of your work, and also writes Deidara. She is quite good, and it would totally make her day if you would check her fic out and give her some feedback. You don't have to, of course, just...if you ever needed something to do for a bit. ;;

Anyway, amazing piece.

I don't know why you didn't get any more reviews for this. I think it's great and you should do some more of these! Funny how the good stories come when your bored,ne?

Such beauty in tragedy, neh?

There aren't very many Naruto poems out there, let alone good ones, and scarce good ones about Akatsuki. A beautiful poem. As a fellow writer, I encourage you to write more.

Wow. This is awesome. o_o -swoon-

Wow, that was excellent. Very deep, and very sad. I certainly hope that the whole Akatsuki organization doesn't get killed off, but that's probably going to happen anyway. The problem with doing that, for the creator, is that almost every fan of Naruto really likes at least one person in the Akatsuki (weird when the villans exceed the main character in popularity.) I'll cease my rambling and commend you for this fantastic poetry. I enjoyed it!

Whoa.. that was amazing. I'm still trying to take it all in... But it was so moving and so sad too- since I'm a crazy Akatsuki fan and all. I don't usually read poetry, so I really don't know what to say in a review for a poem- but this was amazing beyond words...