Very nicely done. The fight and the underlying tension and hidden feelings are very well done. I could picture it so well, the misty rain, the day and the two would-be lovers battling to ignore their secret feelings substituting swords for bodily parts.

wonderful!

though your fight scnene probably is too much explained, but that could be just me.

thank you!

Beautiful. Very descriptive and poetic. You should write more.

I liked all of the imagery, especially the last paragraph, but it was kind of a heavy read. It was like trying to wake up in the morning, in a good way of course. It got me a little confused, but it reminds me of my own writing, so no judgment there. Good work overall.

I feel honored.

Wow, that was really poetic. It was almost more of a poem than it was a story. Good job.

Oh my gods! You call it singles' awareness day too? I made a shirt that said that for Valentine's Day! *high-five*