YES
THIS IS GORGEOUS
OH MERLIN
GOD BLESS YOU

This was adorable—a moment well-captured! And I particularly like your portrayal of James. Thank you for sharing this sweet story!

This is gorgeous. I love it to bits, dear me!

I love these lily and James oneshots! You write the beautifully

Well, Lily attacked Snape? I read the summery and was expected her to be miles OOC, but she wasn't; this was good.

really good, loved it

That was nice :) Thanks for writing it!

That was really nice. I never thought that someone can turn the word "hypocrite" into a compliment! This was really creative :)

Aw I adore this! It is maybe one of my favourites so far. It was just so well done and funny. Witty and clever and sweet and real!

I loved it ! its written really really well and you have some very impressive stories.

Well done

:)

I liked it! A very very good piece, with a unique plot and even a little bit of Lily and Snape action thrown in. I have to say, you've done something very impressive. To find a unique plot for a Lily and James oneshot is darn near impossible, but you did it. And you also had an idea for the head dorms that I'd never seen before, so kudos for that.

In addition, you've got great description and writing balance. Your dialogue flows with the history and surrounds that you put into your story. Very well written.

The only suggestion I had is about POV. This piece is in third person, which makes the POV less set in stone, but it's generally best to pick a point of view and stick with it for maybe 500 words. Then you can change, indicating with a line before a paragraph break. However, this format works as well, it's just a little confusing.

Overall, very well written and thank you for the experience. :)

great story dude! i loved it :)

i had just read yr story and only favourited and then I went and read your homepage! lol

I never really thought about reviewing stories regardless of age- but I think I shall start now :)

Beautifully written story- it was just very different and interesting to read. A true original :D

am about to go off and read more of your LJ stories so you can probably expect more reviews! lol

SP7

Brilliant. Hilarious. I loved it. Nice job!

I enjoyed your story. And i'm adding this to my Lily and James community. :)