O dont get the logic, how do you get by with Kakashi not being Sasuke's teacher with the whole Sharingan thing you know? Plus I personally despise Kakashi as a teacher, he was terrible and didnt help Naruto in canon until returning from his training trip.

Worst decisions I’ve seen in a fanfic, kakashi isn’t with sasuke he needs to help with his Sharingan. Naruto is exactly the same as he was in canon you made hinata even worse than she was in canon as well. If your goanna write a fanfic than you should change how the characters rather than just copy and paste a lot of the characters.

hmm if you changed hinata's position with neji, you should've change her attitude as well, the only reason hinata lacks self esteem is because of her dad. It wouldve been nice if hinata has neji's personality as well.

good story, I hope you continue, greetings, see you, bye!

Bolder still.

Instead of "Kabe inferuno" try "Jôheki Gôka"
Kabe any physical separation that is vertical from rice paper to six feet of granite.
Jôheki rampart, castle wall or exclusion
Gôka hellfire

Here one of mine
Doton: saiseki
Earth style: Ground break maw
Destabilisation and Immobilisation technique
Make pitfalls like those in those video where someone or a car fall through a street pavement.

This is a bold choice you made. I see the explication as in the reasons behind why Naruto whould do that.
1- he want to spare Hinata the pain.
2- this get's him more ensurence against the demon he just met.

I have bad attention span, so on long chapters I tend to get sidetracked a bit, on extra long a lot of sidetrack show (and terribly when writing myself (just you see I do it again. I can't stop it)). This was medium nor extra long. Want to see extra long try reading Third Fang's fics. At least you have the important: quality. Because rare are those that enjoy rice porrige vats (long chapter of poor storytelling) or god view blugeon (this one I am guilty of, rushed exposition. That is when a character show up you get a physical description, their motivation, affiliation, all their powers, and since I get sidetracked you get description of their faction, home town, relation to other characters they know that are then descrived in the same faction. At some point it enter fantastic racism, the geo-politic status of fairyland, religions both around blown up words of some dead guys and cults around reality warping entities. All that going on and on until I realise I just put a hundred and nine words inside a parenthesis, and the characters haven't done anything yet.)

Thats interesting to put hinata in the branch family

Update soon. This is such a cliffhanger. Even though it's been eight years, I have faith in you.

If you are going to write a fanfiction why have you made naruto exactly the same as in cannon what is the point

Pls update. It said 2009 so I should prolly give up

Ibiki and Anko would so cute together️️

I hope hinata gets her Byakugan back but her family I donno think she has the deal still but doesn't then she can be freeeeee! And still use her super cool taijutsu style

If there r gonna be any more couples if there's shikamaruXtemari implied or anything I will fall in love with this book! So MUCH! It would be my dream come trueueuueue
Ps I love ur work