I like this story you have done this more like the books then the games and in my opinion that is amazing. If you want another quote how about Macbeth act 5 scene 3 I think it goes like this "I'll fight till my flesh is hacked from my bones give me my sword and armor." Oh and evil mister king Is spot on for being an umbrella nut ball.

great fanfic _ like many others i'll be keeping my eyes on this one lol you're doing real good _ keep it up!

I like it so far. The pace is a little better in this latest chapter. I would just put * or lines or spaces between the parts when you switch to a different group.

I love that you not only used Rebecca but that you used her as the one from the book series. That has so much potential and Perry really needs to just finish it off. Billy I don't like as much but that is just person prejudice. Good job so far and keep it going!

I agree with the previous post, your going to fast skimming on things without going into much detail.

Regardless of that this is a good story, Rebecca and Billy are great characters and your OC's are pretty good.

And Yay for using Trent! I love that creepy guy. _

Nice plot line and bringing back Billy. The story seems like it's going a bit fast and you should slow it up some. Give some more details of the town and what not. That and try writing out numbers, because it disrupts the flow of the reader when you use the 1,2,3 numbers insted of one, two, three. All in all this is a really good story you got going on and I really wanna see more! If anything else comes up with your writing, I'll help you out, but keep up the great work!

-Raven Thornheart