Sasuke son

I only read two chapters, I had the worst story I've read, by far the worst ...

uh yes sir! (salutes)

yes

Interesting chapter and idea and plot

lmao I like that you have issues with the tongue, but not the rest of it.

They're *nine*. They don't look at the opposite sex that way yet. Naruto shouldn't get nosebleeds when he sees naked girls (not that it's particularly realistic anyways), or funny feelings in his pants or any of that.

The dialogue with Kyuubi was terrible, too. "You're my kid now, call me mom. No complaints, anyways our newly acknowledged parent bond means you're a badass so yeah go fuck that guy up." Also "he smells like snake oil or snake related things" seriously? Why would she say that? That's not relevant in the slightest.

I admire that you're willing to try, and this honestly isn't the worst thing I've read, but it's definitely not great.

This is okay, the only part I think is unreasonable is their age. Three year olds *do not* talk like that. I also don't really think they'd be left to their own devices like that, especially not with weapons on hand like Hinata apparently did.

Why didn’t you put this on crossover so it could have been fucking avoided like panhandlers at Walmart

You'd think an entire village of "so called" ninja would be a LITTLE more observant at NIGHT (considering that's WHEN ninja are SUPPOSED to be active). I always thought the naruto series made little sense with regards to shinobi.. I mean people called literally "SHADOWS" only operate during the full daylight hours? How does that make sense? Doesn't that just make them regular "mercs" with a very high opinion of themselves? Also these people are supposed to vanish and be "as ghosts" and see "underneath the underneath", and yet they ALWAYS stick around to eat up the praise, explain in OBNOXIOUS detail every technique they use. Use techniques that are GUARANTEED to attract all attention for at least 5-10 miles around them. Have some WEIRD "honor code" which should ONLY be for samurai, and in general can't figure ANYTHING AT ALL out for themselves! To the point they can't even see "on top of everything" let alone "underneath" ANYTHING! Absolutely EVERYTHING that ninja are SUPPOSED to be/do, the leaf does NONE of that!

No ninja in recorded history can fly? Um is that excluding: naruto, pein, the tsuikage, sasuke in curse mark level 2, juugo, orochimaru (after he gets juugo's bloodline) and the third kazekage? (naruto and pein both fly around during their fight in cannon, naruto flies AGAIN *several times actually* in "road to ninja" and AGAIN *along with sasuke in curse mark 2* in "bonds")

9999999999 children in one night

no, I would say diaper changing would be a d-rank mission

wait... what!? da hell was tha with sasuke?

uldate

Noooooooooooo good chapter no guy x lee