it doesn't suck! On the contrary, it's really good. I can see a few places hwere it could be improved. For instance, putting "The slave I've become" with "Ignorant to" instead of making them seperate lines. But all in all, it's very good! The only thing I can really say that wasn't that great was how I don't really get what it was about. Is it after Tohru tells Kyo she loves him?

HI! I'm BACK! But only in CLAMP manga, sorry. But even if I wanted to, FF doesn't take my comuters writing program. *sigh*

Anyways, I wanna see more of your peorty! And *gasp* I'm the first reviewer! W00T! *first reviewer dance*