So bittersweet.

Please space out future stories for easy reading.

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I really like the content of this fic, and Jack and Chase are both entirely in character. For future stories, however, don't use pronouns so much, it's a little confusing.

This was good! You should've double spaced between paragraphs, but it was good!

This would be a good story to make multi-chaptered! Think about it, I know I'd read it!

Congratulations, RTH! Your fiction

'Avalanche' has been excepted into

my C2, The Yaoi Archive.

Sensibly,

ScathingSarcasm

...I read this on Gaia. I really liked it. You should keep writing, you're really good. The detail is wonderful. I felt like I was there.

Do how many wonder he/she makes to if same Chase, but some meditation rots him to help to solve them?... I believe that not, Jack's presence will only make it and go that they will enjoy both when they finally clear up the things among both

I really liked it. I loved the way you had Chase keep his trademark cold heartless manner all the way through the story even at the end. Usually in these stories Chase always turns out to be so out of character but you my friend have got him down perfectly in this story.

RYOSEEII~!

I've already told you I loved this, you know who I am... meheheh...

~Lk. DeZ

Dumb Coyote

Some food for thought when writing with two male (or two female if it happens to be the case) be careful with the pronouns. The multiple "He" 's in the story. The exchange here for example:

"'Pretty dark in here.' he stated.

'Yes. It's soothing.' he replied with a smirk as he sat down across from him.

'Soothing...right. Totally.' he agreed, setting his flashlight down upright to illuminate a larger area. 'Chase...'

'What is it?' he demanded irriatably."

To make things easier to understand (even if you think it seems redundant) you need to give the name if the person doing the actions changes. If chase is doing the actions and talking ONLY then you can use "He" all you want. But once a second male comes in you have to identify the change. Like so:

"Pretty dark in here." Jack stated.

"Yes. It's soothing." Chase replied with a smirk as Jack sat down across from him.

"Soothing...right. Totally." Jack agreed, setting his flashlight down upright to illuminate a larger area. "Chase..."

"What is it?" Chase demanded irriatably.

See? Since Jack does the action and the speaking in the third paragraph the pronoun He can be used until Chase takes over.

Hope this helped. Also you may want a double break between paragraphs, just to make it easier.

Other than that great work. Nice little story, very cute.

Oi, I will be the first to say that I luv this fic! It be super sugoi! I got lucky that I was able to catch this right when it was submitted, can't wait to read more of you material! Kya! Ja ne! .

Hm . . . curious.

I enjoyed this - a nice little time-out. And I like the open-endedness created by the armour returning idea.

One thing you might want to consider, though: Double line-break between paragraphs. Single line-breaks work better in books, true, but that's because of the indents - which you can't get on the internet. ;