Sweet! Nice one

wonderful characterization! you mold Balthiers pesonality perfectly! though you could have described some stuff better. i guess, i wish i could fit into Balthiers personalitly as well as you, i have trouble with diolouge like that. well good luck to your next story, you should consider writing some more Balthier POV fics!

Absolutely loved it!

You did an excellent job of capturing and portraying Balthier and Fran. I loved how descriptive you were in your writing, it was written very well and following along (while reflecting back on the gameplay) with the characters was enjoyable! I hope you continue to write more. Especially those having the dashing sky pirate in it!

That really was good! I definitely thought Ghis knew more about Balthier than he let on. What a laugh.

Wow, this was fantastic! I especially love your Balthier; he's so in character! I would really like to read some more Balthier/Fran from you in the future. How about considering it? Regardless, this is great, and you're a really gifted writer!

nice balfran. and yes, you are right; writing dialogue for balthier is so much fun - i do put witty comments in my balfran fict xDD;;

nicenice. i expected more than this, though.

but i think this is still good. write more.

MCHLV; 3 felia.

Hm, an awkwardly adorable ficlet! You kept all the characters frighteningly in-character, and it was so adorable!

I liked this part in the game in particular because it really felt like it would have been this intimate-thanks for fixing the scene!

(P.S.-Beautiful cheesy in trying to calm Fran-it's a good thing)

Wow, I loved it. Balthier/Fran is so yummy. P

Sweetness. You kept the entire party in character, and the words smooth. It is a delight to finish each sentence and then begin a new one. The fifth to last paragraph though could've used a little bit of rewording, and perhaps a little more detail on the scenery. The ending was touching though, you successfully tied the beginning to the conclusion. "Shackles We Bear" is like filet minion; juicy, tender, and a delicacy.

very sweet, and definitely one of the better fran,balthier stories ive seen. i thought you did balthier extremely well, wonderfully entertaining. frans characterization was also spot on.

i didnt particularily like the "..Together we will right these wrongs...I can’t fly alone—I can’t imagine going back to that..." paragraph. somehow i find it difficult to imagine balthier opening up so honestly and deeply like that.

i would praise you more but im in a bit of a hurry. really looking forward to your future writings, especially with these two. great job on the story, its one of my favourite scenes )

'An innocent nudge', god I luv Balthier!

Fantastic little piece, and you got the characters and their interactions just right. Great work :)