Good idea, interesting lines. Personally Im not avid for lyrics or poems between the lines, but it was good. Keep on working.

Aww! Omg! This was pretty good, i liked the way you did it! With the dialogue and everything! Since your a first-timer i won't write a hyper review (like i usually do) so i don't scare you off! I hope you write more! And more about Dave, beacuse oh, i love him so (isn't that a song?). Thanks~

this is great, I really love it! write more fics soon!

That was really really good. You said a lot without saying very much. 7 stars!

Very good. You should continue writing. Next time try a series or something, you're talented.