that was awsome if i were at your house i whould give you $10,00 3 cheers

Ahem...AW!

That was so cute! I was awing like the entire time! Awesome job! I don't like the NaruSaku part, but otherwise, totally awesome!

I thought this story was really good! You did a great job on it!

Love the fanfic...just hate the song:no offense

I really like the tenten and neji pairing but I'm a SasuSaku shipper not a Naruto and Sakura shipper. Otherwise I loved it. I usually don't read neji and tenten stories because I don't like them. But this one I give two thumbs up to.

I think that was great for your first try alone. Keep it up! ;)

Hellu there.

First try on a fic? Well, i won't flame you, don't worry. I don't flame - I give constructive criticism. There's a lot to say.

Please don't take any of this the hard way, I'm only trying to help you improve your writing. I'll be honest.

First things first, there are some verbs which are conjugated the wrong way. It's a waste if people leave on your stories because of a few grammar mistakes. Secondly, sensory discriptions. What do they feel, hear, smell, sense? It helps people get in touch with your characters and understand the story better.

I remember clearly, when I was a little n00b on fanfiction sites, everyone laughed at me. But hey, i've improved since then. And a lot of what I've learned is thanks to my dear bud Hannah who beat the basic writing principles into me with a stick or two.

Anyhow, if you want to get a cup of cyber coffee and ask for some more advice or if you wanna scold at me for saying things you totally disagree with, just message me, alright? I'll be happy to BETA you. Good luck!

-xx- Nika

I loved it! Plewase write more neji tenten fanfics

aw how cute! VERy CUTE!

I LOVE that song! GREAT story! It was so cute!

WOO WOO! Bow down to the awesome fic! This fic is soo awesome! I really luv it!