Thanks for the story. Thanks for sharing. Enjoyed it. Would have liked a little drama besides Edward and Bella not liking each other. Where’s Tanya? Where’s the Volturi?
Thank you.

Bella always wanted to go to Europe... Bella didn’t even want to go to Europe... it can’t be both.

Awww...

I forgot to mention last chapter that I don’t personally care for Tom Cruz. I always liked his movies and I used to like him just fine until he started jumping on couches, giving his opinions on postpartum depression and the whole Scientology crap is also a turn off. I also think he played Nicole Kidman wrong, I’m sure there’s more if I think about it. I don’t know if it’s true but I heard that his sister was his PR person but after he replaced her his reputation went to shit. He used to be kind of elusive but than he just started opening his mouth and putting his foot in it, acting the fool on a regular basis. Sorry, rambled on there.

I couldn’t help wondering if Bree had her own crush on Bella. Her reaction seemed more than curiosity or gossip.

Emette in the bathroom while Bella was showering was a bit much. Where the hell is Rosalie? I don’t think I like them being out of character. It’s fine when the story isn’t mirroring the exact story, it’s strange.

Mmmmmm... The decision of Bella’s change was already made before Edward falls for Bella. Her change hasn’t been mentioned by him yet, I wonder what will be said. He was quite adverse to it in the books.

Emette shouldn’t have been surprised, everyone should have heard them all day.
All of a sudden Bella knows why Edward left. She seemed clueless when she was told Edward was coming back. She was also assured that she was not why he left which seemed to confirm she wasn’t aware her blood affected him.

Titanium? That was silly. I guess there are no windows either.
Emmett would just lock Bella into a room with a black eyed Edward, ridiculous.
I know readers usually focus on the negative and I realize that isn’t fair. You seem to write well and I enjoyed the Edward and Bella interaction.
I think a story is a phenomenal success when I’m fully in the heads of the characters and eager to see what is going to happen next. I don’t notice mistakes or notice if something doesn’t sound right or make sense. The story just flows.

Anything is possible with the right work up and details in a story. I just feel like I’m getting facts with some intermittent conversation thrown in.

Seems a little far fetched. The characters aren’t true to the book which wouldn’t be a problem except the synopsis led you to believe they would be. We missed the last two and a half years. I thought Bella was going to get to know everyone, mostly Edward earlier. We didn’t get Edward at all and no details of the rest of the relationships.

Love the chapter

I like the idea, but already at chapter 2, everything is pretty muddled up. It needs some more structure.

The kiss was cute but the scene was rushed and to matter-of-factly. I don't think it should just be stated off-handed that she'd 'fallen for him' seems a little weird.

Just wanna point out that this is not what would have happened.