This was so erotic.

Wow... That was intense. Why am I imagining that happened on that night 'beneath a moonless sky'

Yum.

Damn! That was hot!

Suggestion: when christine gives erik a blowjob, it does not last hours, just a few minutes. So please correct that.

O_o! Yum...

Great :)

Good story. Langage could have been cleaner and I would have been more in love with it if they were married to each other.

When are you updating every step?

Whew.

i need a cold shower...

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well, Raoul had a cold night in his wedding bed, but Erik and Christine didn't.

Well! I finally read some pure unfiltered smut! Well done my friend. Hope to see more from you.

Yours, KnightCrusader

It was pretty good (very sexy), but here are a few things that you might want to work on:

1. Try to use pronouns more often instead of the characters names. This'll will make your writing smoother.

2. Try to find other words instead of "cock" and "cum".

Other than those little things it was okay. I hope to read more of your work.

Okay I know it's just a one shot... but it was so damn good... you really should reconsider the "oneshot" part. I mean, you really should write a complete phic. I enjoyed it.

Please Please Please, more, more, more!. :D

Kaya