And so, the young hero relinquished Humanity. Smiling with his friend as the locked tails, they gazed upon the sunshine. 5 Years later
No one had heard of the Champion for 5 years. A note turned up at Delia’s house,
“I’ve made my choice.” It read. Delia knee what it meant. she smiled. even if her son was a Pokémon, she accepted him. and so the legend turned to myth, myth to fairy tail, and then forgotten as 2 Pikachu ran through the sunshine, without a care in the world. And they were happy.

Normally I'd make some 10 minute long paragraph on why this story is the best thing I've ever read etc. But I honestly didn't want to have to go through writing it so I'll just say that this story is one of the best I've ever read and a Sequel in the future would make it way better. Maybe some more intimate moments between Ash and Pikachu in the Future also. Idk if you just quit fanfiction entirely or your just taking a break, but Having somebody like you with real writing skill would really make everybody's day. Have a good day and Hopefully you return someday.

wow... this was so great that i was sad to see it end.

The end wus to sudden and I want to know what heppend after that! :( :(

Damn it's finished

thats what she said

This story was a trip and I loved every second of it. You're an excellent writer and it shows. As with with all great stories, I only wish that it didn't have to end.

I will admit I have been critical of this story It’s who I am which I why I resolve to always try a complement sandwich. (Focus on everything someone does wrong deters from the fact that as a whole what they do is amazing this story included) and I have to agree reaching a conclusion says a lot about perseverance and is by far the most important thing (I hate getting into a story only to find that it never ends) as for the ending all I wish is that ash had closure with Gary his mom old companions etc. other than that it was great.

I do have two notes of true criticism again (I can’t help myself) the first is understandable because it played out differently outside of Japan mew wasn’t the hero of the first movie it was out to destroy the inferior abominations which were the clones and could care less about mankind also finding them to be inferior to a lesser extent.

But Aura. oh man. Aura is what my Pokémon fandom revolves around. And your comments on the matter irks me so bad. Ash has been aware of aura and demonstrates that he can manipulate it and as a result with training could potentially do something amazing things with it ever since the concept of Aura was introduced to the Pokémon world franchise. This fact isn’t new to him. He also demonstrates this again across the Aura sphere Riolu story arc (though notability less potently) also whatever mew demonstrated with aura was quite vague but still obviously, surprisingly unimpressive knowing what aura is capable of. what did she do? Radiate her emotions? Aura is such a deep concept radiating on many planes of existence at once as well as having numberless layers to it to show ash something his mind could process without first the necessary training leading up to it or having it completely destroy his mind is like holding up a gear and saying this is a Robot.

Finally I am working on a fanfition of my own so I can appreciate all the effort and skill that went ino this this even more and while I will not disagree that the first half is cringe worthy I can live with that knowing how hard this kind of work is.

Once again thanks for seeing this through

I know I said you were doing better in my last comment but you’re slipping into ignorance again

Mewtwo and the clones don’t hate humans by the end if the first movie and everything else is resolved in the return of mewtwo (the events of which ash actually remembers)

In the anime Lance actually is leading a less large scale version of this movement while Bruno who Is living the nomad life in a “microclimate” of sorts also bearing some semblance to this Ideal. support of this Ideal granted little is known about agitha I know this was written early DP era so I can’t hold you to everything you got wrong but it’s obvious you didn’t watch many episodes of the anime. These are just the things made known before your publishing date. pikachu is male for starters yes he has a female voice actress but so does ash(and most other characters in the original series) General celebi trivia: it is from the future and is bound to the timeline leading up to that spacifc future (if it continues to appear mankind is garunteed a good future) additionally it’s powers were very un-celebi-like as well (I read your comment about how you didn’t watch the movie but basic research would have sufficed). lavender town isn’t far enough inland to have “the tallest mountain” (rock tunnel is almost entirely below sea level being underground instead of being bore into a mountain it’s a lot like the mark twain tunnels) it would have been near the indego plateau instead. In the anime mount silver is actually highly populated being the sight of the silver conference (not “under a rock as repeatedly stated”) charizard was left at the charific valley (yes he was re-attained in the BW series but as I said before you wrote this DP era) why didn’t he get a story like pidgiott’s? leagues as a whole are bracket style not at all like the games (The kanto and jhoto regions don’t even share a league) finally let’s be honest this would not be ash’s solution anyway he would have found a way to defy fate and prevent the uprising altogether yet still improve human/pokemon relations, (this solution, based entirely off Ideals makes him no better than all the villainous teams he ever stopped. “A world without conflict... a world better suited for Pokémon...” where have I heard that before? Oh yeah team magma, team aqua, team galactic, team plasma, and team flare.) also your ash’s Character at first didn’t seem like a plausible future ash either, though He gets closer as the story advances.

However I am glad I looked past all this and plowed through. About the time Brock found out (and most of the inconsistencies were over) this story has gotten really good. And easier to get into.

This has to be THE best story I have read. Incredible work! Of course, that just makes me want to see more, which is definitely your choice. All I gotta say is never stop! You have a talent!

PLEASE DO AN EPILOGUE

You are amazing and this is the best ending an author could create in such a touching and warm story. Thank you for writing this masterpiece and I wish I will soon learn on how to write as good as you _

re-read it. honestly woukd have preferred the epilogue. could have been interesting with where u left it. left me wondering what happened next.

OMG I loved it. I will be honest, I didn't read the part where I believe you said you were on hiatus from this story for who knows how long, but I loved it regardless. Pleasantly, I must also say that I am pleased with your progress as a writer too! I could tell when you started incorporating more story elements, as well as building up the tension and, finally, making the choice. The ending incorporated something only truly great writers know how to use. I loved the story, and after binge reading the last chapters of this story for the last 3 or so hours in between hw, I think I am gonna take a page from Ash's pokemon right now, and hit the hay. I can't wait to read something else by you! Please keep writing.

Sincerely, BlueFlygon17

P.S. Loved the ship, and would love to get like a paragraph on Ash's new life. I am happy with ending too, nothing left to be desired, just curious.
Also, a side note, my only criticism, aside from perhaps rushing the story a bit (or maybe that's just me cause I read way more than what I really should have right now at 11 PM) is that you kinda drifted off on a character you seemed to be considering expanding on (i.e. Bayleef). I felt like you might have been planning to develop its perspective more, and then you lost it along the way or something. Idk maybe it's just me, I know you did leave off in between the story's two parts and might have forgotten about it, just wanted to mention it. Also, the device that controlled Pikachu and Lt. Surge's fate? Idk, I'm just pointing stuff out.

OVERALL AN AWESOME STORY. Don't doubt that. ) Thank you