Hey, interesting story! I love your grammar and you kept the characters in charater too. Update soon!

/Pointed/ a gun at you? I did no such thing. I merely threatened to.

Anyways, very good story and I cannot take credit in owning it. I merely sparked the idea and you wrote it. XD Writing is more important then the sparking of an idea.

Good grammar, though remember, when someone ends talking, you don't cap the first letter of the word unless it's a name. An example:

"I like pie," he said. {Good}

"I like pie," He said. {Bad}

"I like pie," Bobby said. {Good}

Like that. _ Besides a few errors I saw that I didn't see before, the grammar was good. Lovely cliff hanger in that sort of weird, weird way. XD

'Kai opened his mouth to speak, to at least say something that would save him from utter humiliation, but Spencer (either he was evil incarnated or he just picked a really bad timing) immediately walked away' LMAO, I love it!

... I think this is one of the few fan-fics (in this fandom) I read that had not only OC-pairings, but an actual plot. Update ASAP, m'kay?

xo-Keira

Hey, cool story so far! You've got everyone pretty in character, which is always a good thing XD

I liked the part where Kai accused Voltaire and Mr. Dickenson of having a part in the whole thing, and then they both sneezed, lol. Funny how you used that little myth in there

Creepy murder scene. Makes you wonder what the killer's motive is. Well, good cliff hanger, too. Update soon

-TK-