This was a competent attempt at a fic until this point but oh boy are your facts way, way, way wrong it doesn't work that way because the class system was abolished in 1878 also under the consitution made in 1946 there are laws and why didn't anybody call the police over? Major plot hole!

Also what stopped everyone from reporting Tsuruko's assault to the police? It would have been the best way to protect Shinobu and all the Shinmei Ryu is just a dojo and a fading one in not good repair at that with less then 20 students so they would not be wealthy or influental. Also Shinobu would have had more then adequate ground for a restraining order at least or even a lawsuit against the Shinmei Ryu.

Also forced training can amount to assault and probably kidnap and abuse of a minor. Also if Tsuruko killed Shinobu then Keitaro or somebody would have called the cops for sure and Tsuruko would be arrested and with witnesses she would face life in prison if she were lucky and death by hanging if she were unlucky for murdering a young girl in cold blood.

Not to mention Tsuruko's parents and anyone involved in the decision to do this to Shinobu would face a stiff jail term for conpsiracy and at least 25 years in prison if Tsuruko actually killed Shinobu also Motoko could face accessory charges for doing nothing without even bothering to get help.

So please at least do yourself a favour and do not assume and look up the following on Google:

(1) Japanese Law

(2) Japanese Constitution

(3) Japanese Police

(4) Japanese Culture

bravo, encore. simply amazing story plot. also a big fan of keitaro x shinobu stories.

I remember reading this story a while back, and it was only until recently that I started to continue where I left off. I like this, you’ve captured Shinobu’s personality well, and a story that shows off Shinobu in a first person perspective is very rare indeed. It was this that had inspired me to make something that was part story, part diary… I usually get inspiration from most things, but not often from other authors.

If there was one drawback to the story, it would have to be the spelling. I can understand one or two mistakes, but since each entry is only a few paragraphs long, it should have been easy to spot them after a quick proofread.

Overall, this deserves to be on the favourites section, just for the pure fact that it’s in a league of its own. Nice job.

Argh! So good! I withdraw my earlier question about Kentaro...as I have now watched the anime well at least the 25 eps...still gotta do the movies. Oh please do a sequal to this! I would love to see more KeitaroxShinobu work from you.

Long live the pairing KeitaroxShinobu!

Question! Who in the fuck is Kentaro o.o?

*nods thoughtfully* Good good...very nice...a few spelling errors in previous chaps but no big...it really is wierd and a bit unsettling to think of Shinobu calling Keitaro by his actual name instead of Sempai, but I guess since I too eventually plan to write a KeitaroxShinobu fic I should get used to the idea ) pls write more KXS fics!

Aww, such a cute ending_

I demand a sequel! P

Took you 100 chapters to actually get the romance started...Need moar! xD

If you decide to keep on writing, try some Negima! fics, expand the territory as they say...

'till then_

I think you made a slight error here...

"A day in the room is only a single second outside of it. "

"One year to the day. Just over one hour in the real world."

Should have said that only 360 seconds or 6 minutes have passed.

Meh, not that it matters P

Looking forward to finishing this story!

Hiyas. I love your fic so far...keep up the awesome job even though I know it's already done, I'd like to see you write more KeitaroxShinobu fics...

I don't believe you, you're just another MENTALLY RETARDED ASSHOLE who cannot COMPREHEND that Love Hina is set in MODERN Japan which has LAWS and a CONSTITUTION if the Shinmei Ryu pulls this kind of shit like trying to MURDER Shinobu or FORCE her to join them they are going to be INVESTIGATED by the POLICE and they will ANSWER before a COURT OF LAW! And the Japanese GOVERNMENT will SHUT them DOWN!

Do you have the INTELLIGENCE to PROCESS what I am SAYING! Or are too STUPID to comprehend MODERN Japan has LAWS do you GET it!

Wow.

That was a nice ending!

I'm so happy for Shinobu and Keitaro.

Shinobu deserves to be happy after everything she's been through for Keitaro.

Nice story.

This is one of the best stories I have ever read.

:D

It was a strange dream, I wonder what it meant.

Sweet. :)

I feel really sad for her.

Oh...

That must be so hard for Shinobu.