Excellent!

um...i agree with Alyssa Laine

i read many fics similar to this and Snape would not just on the spot say call me Severus and I care for u

it could have been better

This is THE most OOC thing I have EVER read on my ENTIRE life! And I've read OOC like you wouldn't believe. But this tops them ALL. WOW. I could hardly even bare to finish that. Not because it was n't written nicely, but because Snape says to Harry "Call me Severus"... ARE YOU KIDDING ME? WOW. I can't even.. whoa. How do I put this intop words. It's not "bad" per se, but totally unreal and... uh.. I'll just stop there.

Very sad and nice ending.

It was really good. I want to read more of your stories. You are very creative.