This is bloody good- liking it alot. (*adds to favorites*)

Aw man, I love this one. Everything is just...better when Hurley narrates. :3 Perfect characterizations, and just the right amount of humor to amuse the reader but not take away from the seriousness of the story. Great job!

...Plus, I love Hurley's on-the-spot invention of the word "Jesusey". That just plain wins.

*tries to find words*

Wow...just wow. Gave me shivers ]

:') I really like this! Hurley is so funny. Even in dark situations

That was so good! My favorite aspect of fanfiction is when characthers acting like... the characters. And you obviously understand those characters very well. I love seing Charlie and Desmond's relationship through Hurley eyes. That first person naration was amazing! I *so* wish you were a writer on that show. Keep up the great work, I'll be reading. :)

I liked the story overall but at the end with the whole rain thing and Charlie and Desmond knowing each other I really didn't get what was going on. Could you explain?

Pretty damn cool! I still can't believe I missed the whole lightening thing.

Part I made me laugh out loud and that's a good thing because Hurley does that to me on the show, so I fell you're capturing the character very well. It's also very cool to be inside this dude's head! I'm anxious for Part II (which I see is now up)! Please keep up the great job you're doing!

Aww, good start!

“A bit screwy?” says Charlie. “He’s not got one screw fully tightened

Lol! That sounds *exactly* like Charlie! I thought you did a good job with the first person...it wasn't too overdone or too cheesy.

I like it. Poor Charlie. :( (He's my baby) I really like the Hurley POV. You don't come across that too often.