Artie, I think you are the best author in fanfic; the very best I've read yet, and by far my favourite. I know I haven't reviewed much, but honestly, I just didn't want to take the time to stop and write. Sorry ;) .

FABS

Loving every minute of it. I'm on the edge of my seat!

This was a great story. You basically gave me a heart attack when the doctor said Gibbs was dead. This is amazing. K

Wait, if Ziva is in the story, wasn't Pachee murdered when Kate was still around? Just a question. Not trying to be mean or anything. Great story!

Wow! i give it 4

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Gibbs is a complete arse hole

Ok, really like the story but just got a little shock because my name is Megan Johnson, what were the odds of that? XD

awesome story, and regardless what anyone else says, fan fiction is for the fans and you can write it any way you want. Just don't kill Gibbs, lol. :)

love it !

"His rooms are at the base. He’s father is deceased and he’s mother is in home for the mentally challenged in Norfolk. He had no siblings.” Ziva says."

The use of he's instead of his is disconcerting and incorrect. Your writing is excellent except for these type errors. A beta reader could possibly help. However, since I am still in the early part of your writing you may have already cleared up this type mistake.

Now, back to the story!

Excellent story! Love all the fluffiness mixed with the dramainess (don't think that's a word, but oh, well!)

Good on you for not listening to people who want you to change your story. Its yours, no one else's, we're just along for the ride.

Wonder how many of them write the author's of published books and tell them how they should have written it? I bet a bunch. But, I digress.

One big problem, and as this is the first story of yours that I've read I don't know if its been addressed...but you need to look into the rank structure of the military you're writing about. There is no rank of "Officer," but from the explainations, it seems like they were Corporals and Privates.

Other than that, I loved this story! Love how McGee was the only agent that never ended up needing medicail attention (although his reactions to the two pairs seem to show him needing some quickly).

I'm off to read some more of your stories!

I commend you-for a well-written, provoking adventure...and curse you-for your short chapters and infernal cliff-hangers!

Thanks for you efforts...

Wow, amazing story. The plot just had so many twists and turns and had the whole team in it. McGee was the only one that wasn't taken or hurt by the bad guys. He did a fantastic job with keeping it all together and proved himself an excellent agent.

Loved the ritualistic stuff, the drugs and all that, like in Vice with Tale of the Goat with Tubbs and Legba...lol...

Oh and the steaming scenes were great, I can't see Gibbs in front of the team like that but then with all that happened and fiction it's can happen. Loved that drug with Jenny and how he had to make it with her, he's lucky the nurses and doctors didn't come in the room or demand to...lol...

Oh and Ziva and Tony, yummy stuff there too...The whole story was filled with so much and written nicely...I enjoyed the read so much...Sue