this was good

Gosh. That was SO GOOD. great writing and a great job of weaving your character into the original plot! Thank you for writing this :)

Oh god DROPPED.
She is utterly pathetic.
Damsel in distress versions of 10th walker do more even though they have no skills that she does.
She literally is useless everytime there is a danger
How can she be an ancient warrior when she is so damn useless.

Her design and character is good but she is way too damn useless
Might as well read about average convience store worker who somehow gets to go with the fellowship, because atleast she will DO SOMETHING,

So far everytime there was danger or anything she needed epin savin EVERYTIME. like f off, can't believe i got this far without realizing that she would forever be a useless sack of meat

Isn't she supposed to be fast? Or skilled with the sword? a warrior?
Why does she constantly need help from Legolas? She is bloody worse than the hobbits with how much legolas has to help her EVERY TIME ANYTHING HAPPENS.

talk about crazy rushed relationships

I don't know if you still use this site, but, thank you -thank you so much for this amazing story. this is the best -by far- lotr fanfiction I've read. you kept their personalities amazingly which is a very hard thing to do. I can't wait for the romance!
Carita is al so my favourite OC. god. this is delicious to read. thank you again!

It’s an interesting story concept. However, for a Maia, she’s quite useless. I mean, she’s supposed to have gifts enhancing her battle prowess, but she gets injured in every single fight she ends up in. Gandalf coddles her in Moria. For example, if her gifts are supposed to enhance her battle prowess, shouldn’t she be able to stand on par with a Balrog just as Gandalf? You’re concept here is very flawed. If she really was the daughter of Varda, she shouldn’t be that weak.

Her past with Sauron does not line up with the original timeline, but that is easily overlooked.

It’s just sad that you took a character with a lot of potential and made her into a hopeless woman with some decent skills with a sword, and shiploads of tedious angst that worries everyone around her for no more reason than it fills the plot with something. In every single chapter someone asks if she’s “alright”. It gets old.

Thank you for writing and publishing this story!

This was amazing from start to finish. Best OC I have ever read in a LOTR FF. I had a favorite story before but now this has become my new favorite! Not only does it have a great plot(all the original writing) but it's written well(better than well, brilliant really!). I may check out your other stories if their summaries grab my interest.

This story was absolutely phenomenal. I know this was written many years ago, but thank you for sharing with us.

Stunning! Absolutely stunning!

I absolutely loved this so story!

It was a good story i only disliked how she portrayed as a badass at the beginning but would literally passout and get injured in every fight. Now injury during war is understandable but i mean she is supposd to be the most experienced and have these extra powers. She seemed more normal with few meaningles powers. Anyway still liked it fun story. Oh when i mean meaningles, i mean self heal of small wounds pshhhh. I was thinking wolverine style or has control over an element or can teleport something unique and worthy of someone of her status but she was more like Eowyn but more stubborn.

Sauron's original name was Mairon. Annatar was an ALIAS he gave himself...in the SECOND AGE.

Carita would have made a good OC...but you ruined her character and this story's potential by her history with Sauron (making her "wise" yet naive, especially when Sauron fell into Morgoth's service long before the First Age and already had a cruel reputation). You also displayed ignorance over the timeline. Finally, how could she be a Maiar yet not be as powerful as Gandalf?