EstellaB,
You have no idea how many times I've read and reread this story. I don't know if you can guess how much it made me smile, or how it comes back to me at strange times, but sometimes I'm seized with a desire to read it and it gets better every time. Thank you.

Peter thinks Jill should be with Edmund?

I mean, I love Ed, but Jill could never be with anyone else besides Eustace.

Fact.

...

And Eustace can be romantic! I mean, that comes as a surprise...

This was one of the purest and coolest fics about Eustace and Jill...

Even your 15-year-old male brother should admit this is a VERY good romance!

Don't let him discourage you, I'd like to read more :D

-LuMezengA

SSOOOOO BLOODYY CUUTEE!

I wish I could write a romance like this, it was the best Eustacexjill oneshot, EVER!

Awww! I love Jill and Eustace, and you just write the sweetest interactions. I loved the ending, especially, although it did feel the tiniest bit rushed, but maybe that was just me reading so fast. :-)

Hee! So cute! 3 I don't really have much to say about it besides that. It's a lovely vignette. A!

"Edmund danced! With a person!" Oh, this made me laugh so hard.

-giggles and dances- What a cute story! I've seen some pretty good Jill/Eustace oneshots but this tops them all.

It's a sweet story, and my only correction/advice is on dancing positions. The classic ballroom position is the guy's left hand on girl's waist, and he holds her left hand with his right. Not one hand on waist, one on shoulder. The girl puts her right hand on his shoulder, and left in his hand.

And later you said he put both hands on her shoulders when he addressed her, but after that you said he realized his hand was still on her waist. If he moved it back you might specify that. Otherwise it's a nice story. Good job!

Aravis

If this is what you write when under the effects of Coca Cola you should drink it more often! (At least that was what I thought) This fic is so beautiful! The way you jumped from a simple day in England to the end of "The Last Battle" and brought them together without messing any of the books in the least was just great!

I loved this!

Oh... That was absolutely beautiful. Really. I loved it. I think you've written my favorite Eustace/Jill of all time. :)

Oh, so sweet! It sent shivers down my spine. in a good way. ;) I loved it! I haven't read a better Eustace/Jill, but then your story is coming from you, a Christian, so it is purer than some. great job!

Aravis

Great story! I loved this! Thanks for writing this! I don't know if the last two chapters are allowed though... Anyway, I loved your story! God bless!

I am crying! I have tears in my eyes, honestly! TT-TT

I always get so choked up at stuff like this! Jill/Eustace is like, my obession, and you just...you just...amplified it in an explosion of romance and fluff!

And I freaking love you for that.

Oh, gosh, I need a tissue!

Amazing writing, PLEASE write more stuff, you are now on my favorite authors list for all enternity.

And finish Not Meeting the Inlaws (I really hope I just got that title right), but it was awesome! :3

aw...very cute!

Story: 9.25/10. It's a nice little oneshot. You manage to keep the story interesting. I especially liked how they decided to wait until they were older to take things too seriously. That was very sweet and original and you obviously aren't so caught up in the ship that you sacrificed telling a good story.

Characters: 9.5/10. Wow. You have everyone so in character and I love it. I especially liked Eustace, since I think that he is rather hard to write IC. Edmund could probably use the most work, character wise, but even he is pretty good.

Creativity: 9/10. A short "I want to get my ship together" fic can only get so creative but I think you do a very good job of avoiding unrealistic cliches.

Writing: 8.75/10. In general, your writing is is really nice. Some of the dialogue really stands out in my mind. I think your writing is occasionally choppy and the first paragraph, in particular strikes me as awkward. Your first paragraph should be one of your best.

Believability: 9.25/10. I love that you have kept the fic and the characters very down to earth. I'm not sure that it is incredibly likely that they would all be living together, but it's not outside the realm of possibility either.

Overall: 9.25/10. This is a really nice fic. I would say your strongest point is that you have such a good understanding of the characters. Make your writing a little more fluid and this fic will be near perfect.