This. Is. Amazing. I read Pits and basically cane running to this story because I was too curious and you never disappoint, do you? I have to say, I wasn’t expecting a Lancer-Focused chapter but it is perfect!

(replying to another commenter who probably won't even see this) Ryleh, the author explained that the pits aren't in the ghost zone, and that rules like that don't apply to the pits. Read the original story more carefully... it's explained either in the scene when Former and Danny were talking, or the scene when Danny and LJ were.

Oh my god I sobbed

I think the most powerful part about this is that you made this chapter from Lancer's POV

Thank you

Can’t ghosts... not hurt people in the ghost zone? Like, the episode where they introduce Walker, Danny goes “Oh yeah, if I turn human in the ghost world, it’s like being a ghost in the real world! Nobody can touch me!” When you take that into account, this fanfic really makes no sense and I couldn’t stop thinking about it the entire time I was trying to focus on the story.

Whoa. This story packs quite a punch. Poor Danny. That was simply tragic. At least he has Sam and Tucker...and Jazz, even his parents and Lancer. All those people will have to be there for him in the coming months...what Walker did to him is beyond horrible.

I know you've written of Danny's experiences in "The Pit" and I will read it...but not yet. I just can't stomach it right now I think.

Great story.

This ffn 11 years ago... :'(
Author... You managed make me cry...
This awesome story about Danny... :'D
I made your story as favorite :)

R.I.P Crusher.

You were a good guy. And ghost.

Hope you will live a peaceful life in your incarnation.

"I managed to write an entire Lancer-based chapter without using one book-related comment. " /Battle Royale!/ How did you manage that?!

ti really does sound like Lancer. And it "uses concrete details to evoke emotion in the reader". ;)

I hope you don't mind me pointing out in ch1 how he is "unable to breath"…but I suppose Danny might make that spelling mistake, especially traumatized.

I need more! I know this is almost 11 years old...but I need more!

"Welcome to the Phandom".
With Care
Mika

I have no words that can describe your writing or your story. But please know that it was a breathtaking story, that you should be more than proud of.

Oh my god! Danny, sweetie! Come here! *hugs him* Oh my gosh, you made something as torturing, possibly more, as the story i'm gonna right where theres mental and physical abuse for our sweetheart of a boy, mental for three years and physical for one. I am SO glad I never read that. I would've died of sadness. And to think, I thought things like 'stay' were sad. This gave me enough info on it. Y'know, I can just imagine Danny, outside the classroom, curled up into a ball crying, his friends crying with and consulting him. To bad in my story, he won't have any freinds. Just Dash, and not 'till the 2nd of 3rd chapter. Tuck left cause he turned trans when he was thirteen, girl to boy (enter mental abuse) and then Sam left when he was revealed he was gay (enter physical abuse) Practically...? I'm still trying to figure that out. Oh, also, no Jazz. Just Dash, who will soon be his bf. Swaggerbishie fl! Woops. Diverted from the point. Point is, this is a sad story that I didn't need to read the prequel of, made me want to hug Danny, our little sunbeam of a halfa child, and did not effect me mentally even though it's pretty disturbing and i'm only a tween. Point is (again,) it's an awesome story! How much did I write? Omg, i'm on my dad's freaking ds typin' this! The flip?!

daaaaamn

Like Pits, this is amazing as well! I love how angsty this is. Love how you describe the situation too. I found it to be believable and realistic.

Keep up the good work!

(Actually, I want to write more but am currently lost at words xD)

Third time reading this. Still trying to wrap my mind around the fact that it is possible for someone to be this good at angst. It's not possible. You are impossible. Your writing is too good.

I CRI EVERY TIME

~LG