Beautifully written, but now I think I need to let a vein. Why can't he love her?

Very well done. Descriptive without obsessing about non-chalant details, beautiful - inspite of content (and I'm no BA shipper). You manage to interlock thoughts, actions and feelings in a way that is a rare gift. Very well done... I sure hope you'll not let this be your last attempt.

Very well written story...but I must say, I feel like I need to go hang myself now. It was so sad...unlike several people that reviewed this story, I AM a BA shipper and always will be. This was VERY painful to read, but I had to finish. Great job with this...but I don't think I can read anymore Non-BA stories anymore. It was killer!

~Snyder~

I just came across this. Fantastic! Like, WOW!, fantastic. I think I was holding my breath the entire time I was reading this. Just lovely! Thank you, and please keep on writing!

Oh... that was just... sad. Poor Alex. :'(

What a fantastic piece nonetheless.

I agree with terem. An excellent debut. I also have difficulty with Goren and Eames together but there are very few others in the CI universe with which to pair him. You did well with his reluctance and eventual capitualtion-powerfully erotic. Please keep writing.

I've been reading at off and on for a couple of years now, but I've never registered or posted. I read your story and found that I had to register so I could send you a review.

First, my disclaimer. I am NOT a Bobby/Alex ship fan. I don't think they belong together and frankly, do not understand why that seems to be the prevelant fantasy. Now on to your story.

EXTREMELY well written and I don't say that often. I write professionally (not fiction) and write novels for fun. I also write fan fiction (not posted here) for fun and I know good writing when I see it. This is excellent.

Although, I don't entirely agree with your characterization, the 'what if' scenario you suggested covers your bases. You have an excellent grasp of the characters and how you want to represent them.

You handle the language beautifully. Your adjectives are strong and marvelouslly descriptive. I an shocked to find out that this was your first attempt. Do NOT let it be your last. Keep writing. And start writing original fiction. You're good enough to get published someday.

Wonderful piece.

I loved your description of Bobby and his relationship with Alex in the first chapter. What really sucked me in. The rest of the story is so very, very sad but oh so well written. I would say that your first fanfic is a hit and you should write many more.

I think that ending was fitting. As always, you write very well. I hope to see more from you. I'm going to go read something fluffy and sweet now.

That was so painful. Yet so amazing.

Okay- crying now. That was so sad- poor Alex. And if it's not the end, why is it the end? Or are you just being generous and allowing us to dream that maybe later they'll be together. Shh. It's what I'll think anyway. And if you don't write something else missy - I'll stalk you annoyingly forever. You are a fantastic writer - and you have to keep going. I don't care what you write, I'll read it. And that's saying something. So go get a plot bunny. .

Devastating. Absolute soul-jarring devastation.

Which is the mark of a good writer.

Uggh, there is no way I could've taken this (the very idea was so painful!) if it hadn't been for your obvious talent. I'm definitely in for more of your fanfic but man...

I'm so so sad right now. Fortunately, gidget's story will probably help cheer me up. I'm going to go read the latest chapter right now and lick my wounds.

*sobbing* NO! LOL God, this story was so depressing. Has me in tears. I knew it would. God. I need B/A fluff now...LOL Anyway, yes, please continue to write more. :) You're very talented. I'm hopeful that your next piece actually puts B/A together romantically and let them be happy and together at least at the end. Though, that's not really a requirement. Anyway, I'm looking forward to more writing from you. I know whatever it is will be excellent.

I feel so bad for Alex at the moment. Really, really, awful. And Bobby, too, for having to feel so distant while being as near as two people could possibly be. I'll second Marion here though. I hope they find one another in the end.

Excellant chapter, I can't wait to see where you take this.