HAHAHAHAHA! kill that traitor bastard! RIP OUT HIS HEART! AND SET IT ON FIRE!...

okay enough evil ranting for the day... i cant wait to see where this goes... sex? lol

wow.. i could jack-off to that last part..

Why there is always a Demon named Damien? Anyway, I wait to know what are the excuse of Wyatt for killing his parents.

Hello! Just here to say that this story is great and also to point out a few things:

Ch.2

"'I couldn't kill him.., Wye.., because it was our cousin.'"

Here, Christ was probably talking about Mikayla, who is (I think) a girl. Maybe a typo? Also, you don't need the elipses after the "him" and "Wye".

"'Paige.' Wyatt hissed under his breath. Wyatt's mind started to wheel."

I think you meant to say "reel", and there should be a comma after "Paige".

"When Wyatt reached him he placed his hands on either side of his brothers face, his breath caressing Chris's cheek."

I'm not exactly sure if breaths can caress cheeks -;;

"'Wyatt..,, please,' Chris begged, his eyes wide."

The commas in there should be deleted as well.

Those are just several grammatical errors that I've seen. Maybe you could try asking someone to be a beta for you. The story itself is engaging. Please continue to write! :D

Thanks asm613, for your "helpful" advice. I went to reply, but you blocked PM on your profile. Huh, go figure. So then I went to see stories you had written. None, go figure.

So to answer some of your question : I left HIM as a him rather than a her because the READERS did not know the sex yet. And no, the "boys do not go insane because of aunt piper dying". Seeing as how I haven't written why yet stop trying to be smart and guess because you have failed.

But thanks for correcting my spelling! That was my bad :)

When her Aunt Piper had passed away, the two boys had lost their minds.-this is your big how the boys went evil story?

this has got to be one of the most juvenile stories i've come across. you actually had a demon kick blake in the shin. that's what kids on play grounds do. and chris discovers he can't orb- he doesn't call for wyatt then- you wait until just before he passes out- this is crap- sorry to tell you. see ya

(" I couldn't kill him.., Wye..,)-HIM? U wrote it was a girl not a boy.

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(his body withering under his brother's)-wrong word here. 'withering' means drying up and dying. you meant to use the word 'writhing'- that's the one that means moving his body.

and if wyatt wants to make sure chris doesn't get in danger or kidnapped- all he has to do is make him stay in the underworld. it was chris's stupid move to leave the person alive-to set traps or tell others and kidnap him. you made it obvious that paige and or her children are going to kidnap chris. he answered her questions and gave away information. and if she could orb away- why would she run to the danger, get to the danger, take her hood off, look at the dangerous people and then stand there and talk. she could have orbed from a safer place inside when she heard the commotion. that even made it more obvious that you wanted her to be the one to give the info on chris to whoever kidnaps him.

it's less fun to read when things are so obvious.

yet another promising story not continued...what a shame

oh what will the sisters do? how will aunt paige treat chris? will she know that hes been mind wased? will they all accept him back? i bet that damien gets fried! will damien as a last resort use chris as a sheild? will wyatt kidnap chris and lock him up so he cant leave him? will chris be so confued and mentaly unstable that he kind of just shuts down? will his cousins have to take care of him? will chris be pregnant? will chris look at them and feel like its all his fault? will he stop eating? will he try to go to the past and fix things? who else survived? are his aunts really dead or were they all sent to that place in the spell, the worst fear place? will phoebe show up and feel all of chris's uncontroled emotions? will leo show up and just hold chris in a fatherly, protective loving way? will chris just let all of his emotins out and cry? poor chris.

Um please continue

please please update

WHAT! Dont stop there...please continue soon. I cant wait for more!

This is fantastic!

OHH love the suspense ,keep em' comin

This is good, Please update soon.

This is so cool, I can't wait to read more please update soon.