Awww this was definitely entertaining. :)

XD BEST STORY EVER !

You should write a sequel to this it was hilarious

haha poor tuxedo i mean normal girls are dangerous on pms but girls with powers now that is terrifying but hey he did end up getting kissed by four girls for getting them the magic pill but then slapped and then cried on because they felt bad but then yelled at again for forgetting water that poor poor man can never do anything right during this time but hey atleast venus wasn't with them yet because four is bad but five he would be dead

Poor guy! :D

Now this one I can get behind and really do some good concrit, as I do have a bit, before the good stuff.

You've missed a few areas where you have them either reply, said, etc. A comma goes there. Suggest you keep an eye on that, as I tend to miss it myself. And don't forget the piece afterwards doesn't need to be capitalised, unless it's a name.

And as for kicking, punching etc, italicise that. It would look much better that way, and show it's an action. As well as anything in singular quotations, just italilcise those instead, and take the quotations out.

I really couldn't find much of anything else to concrit here. This was pretty funny, and had a good laugh at this. Now, I don't mind concritting work such as this, but other kinds I won't do.

-Luna, Constructive Criticism Guild

Hilarious. Keep it up

Oh poor Tuxido Kamen...

LOL XD ! LOL

hahahaha i laughed so hard my sides hurt plus i always am real umm bitchy please pardon my french ;) but the whole Men in arms was hilarious but if i was a senshi if i were a senshi that man who said that would of died before he even finished that sentence all in all i loved this story

This is hilarious! I can't stop laughing! hahahaha!

CTFU ROFLMAO FUNNY AS HELL

sorry, tooo lazy to login...

anyway! oh my gosh! hysterical in 5 different levels!

Haha, poor tuxedo mask. I loved this story, it's very funny :)

Shit tuxie got killed R.I.P he was a great man NOT!