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ha I love stories that torture jaken, I hate him.

that was funny and really cute.

Thats hilarious!

*mad giggle* I cracked up when it said:

"Sesshomaru gagged on his spit."

No idea why lol. I giggled even more at:

"Sesshomaru gave her a constipated look."

that story was cute

*Claps* That was so funny! It's just like Jaken to pass out... You kept people in character.. somehow. With what happened it must have been hard to keep Sesshomaru in character but you did! Wonderful job! Bravo! -Tifa Tyndal

... FLUFFY!

HA HA

This is a pretty good oneshot. I like how you use the pauses (...) its rare to see that kind of thing. You've got some nice vocabulary as well. However, there was one line of dialogue that tripped me up.

“Explain.”

Rin’s smile got even wider. “The name game is when you pick a name and you sing it in a special way! Want Rin to do Lord Sesshoumaru’s name?”

Sesshoumaru seemed unsure. He hated to admit it, but he was curious. So he nodded.

Then Rin blushed and looked down. “W-Well…. actually…Lord Sesshoumaru’s name is very hard for Rin to do…so…Rin had to use Sesshoumaru’s nick name…”

Now Sesshoumaru was confused and curious. “Explain.”

How about for the second "Explain." you say "What?". It sounds more realistic in my opinion. Keep up the good work

I hope you can read my story "Faiths Feathers" and leave a review. I would greatly appreciate your time and attention.

Signed

Kouta Aburame

cute

OMG I LUV IT!LMAO!

You use aragonite in paragraph 3.

that was sickeningly cute!