I kind of want to see an alternate version of this chapter where the main 'min actually does fully submit to the Puffstool, but otherwise this chapter is nice.

It has been a long time since I read such a beautifully written story. I believe that this is truly a masterpiece of the Pikmin Community, and that all fans should read it. This author has the talent to write things that touch the reader. Never in my life have I felt so much emotion from reading. The plot is progressive with no filler, there is character development, classic Character vs. Self and Character vs. Society conflict and an emotional, not overly dramatic or cliché ending.

So BEAUTIFUL, Sequel perhaps?

Beautiful

Huh, I never really expected the main character to change color. I mean, the story IS called "Spored" after all, so I sort of expected the main character to be a Mushroom Pikmin for the entire story. Whatever, it was still a cool little twist. Another thing I found a bit confusing: I wasn't too sure whether the main character turned into a blue Pikmin or a cyan Pikmin. I don't know if this is already explained later in the story, or if he simply turned into a blue Pikmin, but just thought I might as well point it out.

In terms of everything else, the plot was nice and dramatic, and I liked the (insane) number of plot twists too! I DID spot a few grammar mistakes though (which I don't feel like bugging about right now. You got lucky!) Overall, great two chapters here!

Well, I think that's the first time I've ever put spoilers in a review. Whatever, it's the reader's fault for reading the reviews before reading the story...

Well I haven't read this in a while, and I had forgotten how great of a writer you are! There were only several grammar mistakes, which I won't go nagging on about.

As for the plot itself, absolutely amazing! The pacing never seems too rushed or too slow, and you use almost every element of a story perfectly! I could keep going on praising your story, but I won't. Excellent job as always!

My God, that last part of chapter 12 was sad. I think it's getting repetitive at this point, but you know what I'm going to say; these two chapters (11 and 12), were AMAZING. The backstory was wonderful, and I love how you keep subtly reminding that the main character is just a Mushroom Pikmin, an outsider. And then there was that little Pikmin 2 surprise that you gave at the end of chapter 12...

BRAVO! That's all I can say. There were several stupid grammar mistakes (specifically in chapter 11, when the blue Pikmin says, "That is what we all our!" instead of, "That is what we all are!"), but because the story of these two chapters were amazing, I won't make a big fuss over it.

Wow these two chapters (9 and 10) were FULL of descriptions. As usual, you did an outstanding job, and I never even knew it was possible to have such an accurate, yet very long description of a battle scene. I also like the different personalities of the characters, the increasing sense of danger that the that was described well, and the numerous foreshadowing you've inserted. All in all, this was a GREAT set of chapter you've written!

Wow, I liked these two chapters! Although, I was thinking why you be so cruel as to make an EXTREMELY hostile Pikmin type. I was literally mouthing to myself "what the [insert curse here]" as I read your descriptions of Pikmin fighting each other. In other words, you made me feel devastated for making such an instigative chapter. I always feel sad when Pikmin have to fight each other unnecessarily... I'm not the biggest fan of wars.

I'm going to make my reviews brief from now on, but overall, this set of chapters were wonderfully described, and you're really good at being able to stir up emotions!

Congrats V rex. You've achieved 200 reviews. Now go for 300! XD

Anyways, I don't really have much to say about these two chapters (5 and 6) besides praise. Nearly every element of a story that I can think of was absolutely terrific in these two chapters, and its quite a large improvement from your first chapters. It just makes me want to read the story all the more! Also, the main character's interpretation of a leader reminds of something I wrote...

Anyways, AMAZING two chapters here, and the improvement is definitely noticeable!

Your grammar in these chapters (3 and 4) is a MAJOR improvement from the first two chapters. So, I won't be bugging you with that. Although, I did find it a bit weird that you put periods after the quotation marks, instead of before.

I liked the concept of how you made Mushroom Pikmin blood clear. Although, I wasn't the most fond of reading the desert crossing, as it made up practically half of these two chapters. I know you probably did it to show how they struggled to survive, but it still bugged me a bit. That fighting scene at the end of chapter 4 really made up for it though. Again, descriptions of everything were absolutely AMAZING. The descriptions of everything helps to give more flavor to the otherwise dull scenario that the desert seemed to give (again, it's just my opinion that I thought that the desert was dull. I mean, when aren't desert scenes dull?)

It's still early in the story, so I'm not going to really judge characterization that much, as the main character seems to be very fluctuated. Being a leader at some points, yet acting frustrated and needs reassurance at other times. Of course, it's still early as I said, so I'm being a bit more lenient on it.

Overall, these were a nice two chapters, and I liked your use of cliffhangers, as they really made you want to keep reading.

I'll be reviewing your story two chapters at a time. It makes it easier for me.

As to the story itself, I have to say that it was very original and very well executed. I also liked the characterization, and how the personality of the main character seemed to change as he turned into a Mushroom Pikmin.

Your descriptions of everything are AMAZING! I love how you're able to make an accurate description of everything, and how your metaphors are always spot on. Great job in that aspect!

Grammar... I'm a bit of a grammar nazi, so... I was a bit annoyed to see the numerous amounts of the little mistakes littered in these first two chapters. I was especially annoyed to see that in chapter 1 the main character says, "I ways up there too" with that extra "y", and in Chapter 2 you spelled "petals" as "peddles", and when describing the Bulborb, you said, "except for its mouth with was tanned" where you said "with" instead of "which". Because the story itself was so good though... I'll ignore the grammar mistakes, but I'll still note it out in my later reviews.

All in all, this was a VERY good first impression of the story. I'll make sure to keep reading and providing my feedback as I read.

Dear V Rex,
I absolutely loved your story. You are really adept at pouring emotions into your story, which made me cry a lot. I sincerely hope you continue to make such good fan fictions. Possibly a sequel? All I know is that you should eternally be in the pikmin hall of fame.
Your eternal fan,
Pikmin Biscuit

Besides the sorta-crap grammar, this is absolutely amazing. It'd be even better if someone cleaned this story up, but even now this story is one of the best on this site.

Wow... I know I haven't been there from the beginning, but I've been almost addictively reading all 21 chapters these past couple days. Your story reminds me of a Star Wars book I love called "Darth Bane: Path of Corruption," but I like the happy ending.

I'm actually creating my own kind of Pikmin fanfic and your story really helped me kind of figure out how I'd like to write my story.

Thank you for writing this epic story and the inspiration for my own story.

- Dylan Simons(Diran-kun)

Ps do you have an email, so I can possibly consult you on my story.