This is absolutely amazing! I love it!

Beautiful. Really well done. You really punched in that angst and regret with every word and paragraph. The end gives me a sort of hope that she and Neji will get together? Even so, loved the sense of tragedy.

Love this so much. 2nd person is very hard to write.

How tragic and hopeful at the same time.

that was beautiful. i love how she thinks of all the possibilities its like tenten is sweighing down whether death is worth it or living is more worth i

The form is just amazing. It fit perfectly with their characters, and I can't help but smile.

It's definitely an interesting writing style, it really draws you in, though I do have to disagree with the picture you've painted of Neji being invincible, because for all those times Tenten could've awakened to white-eyed children, she could've also awakened without a husband.

Still a good read nonetheless.

~Téa

Second person point of view-very difficult to write, but you handled it beautifully. I was put off in the beginning because I saw you said LeeTen and I was like WHAT! But I ended up reading it because...well, because you're the author. And I'm glad I did. What a portrait you painted of the pitfalls of pride.

This is why you're one of my favorite authors Dizz. And yes, it's selfish of me to say that, to know that, and save your stories up for a rainy day. When the world is 'blah' at best, and the writing well seems dried up, I can always count on going back to my favorites, and reading all the stories I've kept in my stockpile. Maybe it's just the fact that I like to save the best for last...

Amazing story, and very tragic yet hopefull at the end. I love the way you wrote the present and then the pretend. The what if, and the what is. It made the short one-shot speak volumes of chapters of story. And it's perfect. Each paragraph is a chapter in Tenten's life, and the reader fills in the blanks. I personally thought that the hints at a fight between Neji and Tenten was incredibly bitter-sweet. It showed that there was a falling out, but it also showed that they cared enough about each other that such a fight had meaning, and that it left scars in their relationship... as friends, teammates, and maybe (the possibility) of more.

Favorite line: "Where you would have been married to your first love instead of your second." Wow how powerful is this? Seriously I think this can touch soo many people who read this, because there's so many people who have an adolescent love that falls away, and is replaced, maybe again and again, until you find "the one". Loved that line.

A part of me almost wished it stayed a tragic tale, but it's quickly drowned after reading your ending line. I loved that Neji had those same ponderous eyes.

Perfect one shot. /bows down to your greatness

Wow, this is a really interesting POV. I've never read a second-person fic before. But this was very skillfully written and deep. Yeah, I also tend to portray Neji as a bastard (which he kind of is) despite the fact that I like the occasional NejiTen. Nice job!

wow.. yeah.. i never thought of how Neji and tenten would clash.. if u think about it in a deeper way.. this was a very interesting read.. and yes.. i also think that with neji's personality and pride, tenten would be married off to lee.. with his personality too.. soo... this is realistic... great job..

Wow...

Honestly you could make me cry even without trying. I am your number one fan! Your stories are so...deep. Continue writing nejiten XD. You're an one hell of a writer!