Great story I really liked it a shame that you gave up on it.

Sorry, but with the spelling mistakes (cam-came) and the general predictability/ cheesiness of this fic, I'm not going to go any further.

well it was a good run. good luck with life.

i know it's not much but you have my deepest sympathy, trust me it's hard to get, i'm quite emotionless.

one way to stop flamers is to turn off anonymous revies. hope that helps

ridiculus story.

Wow! I don't know how to start! Its fucking unbelievable! How old are you! AND YOU'RE STILL ALIVE? How? you are my new hero. Anyone that can be that fucking stupid and still use a computer is a hero in my book!

Your story does not even begin to make sense, it is obviously ripped off from various sources; absolutely zero originality. The only thing I enjoyed was Hedwig dying, only because the owl never caused you harm and does not deserve to be fucked up in a story you shat out of what passes for a brain.

Dude! It is a sex scene! 8 yr olds with no sexual experience can come up with better fantasies! What is wrong with your Penis? (don't really tell me)

You could make your story so much better by just deleting one thing; your story.

As a colleague of mine said, your story sucks shit! It's a good way of putting it.

All that being said you think maybe all these bad things happened to you because you insist on ruining the cyber world with your crap?

Just something to think about...

Yippee Kay aye mother fucker? How DARE you kill Hedwig? What the hell was the purpose of that?

I can't wait to see what will happen next. please update soon _

If you'd like I could do my best as a helpful oppinion if nothing else, but I'd need to know some things about your story that I don't already know. If you still need help with your story e-mail me at, and I'll see what I can do and you can see if you would like to work with me. *lol* Talk to your sooner or later.

Well I can see an up and a down side to this chapter. On one hand you didn't really say what kind of combat training Harry had and that kind of leaves a lot to be desired about this chapter. At the same time, one the other hand, because you didn't say what kind of training he had you could have him pull anything out of thin air and slaughter the enemy with it. So with that said I'm not to sure if I'd change this chapter if it were me or if I'd leave it the way it is.

You got the month wrong for the first day of school. The first day is on September first not August.

How did Draco's mother get to her feet if she was bound to the chair? You never told the reader that the ropes were cut or even untied.

I think I personally would have kicked Draco's ass if he through one of my books. That's just me though hahaha.