As to the statement, "and give an idea of how Ron will act". It's not an act and it's not "on and off"; he's always an idiot!

Well, you want a review? Here is one. The story is not fundamental course which is good. I just wish you to have more time to write in the future. However, a lot of time past, since it was published.

You are so awesome oh my gosh this is like as good as J.K. Rowling you should really consider writing professionally if you already don't. This is sooooooooo good! You could literally become famous and rich for this, I'm not joking.

you have a good sense of humour - some of the "thoughts" that Harry has are pretty funny for instance. But the plot... was ok until Hermione's grandma came along; that was pretty boring (for me anyway).

Oh and hey... you win one of my hilarious mis-spelling awards for spelling "dorm-mates" as "doormats"!

pas mal

Well lets move on to third year...you have really changed things

poor neville!

new spin, not bad.

Hi,

You last chapter was well written and was quite exciting to read. You had enough changes from her tale that it felt like a whole new story.

You obviously set it up to continue. Some time has passed since you first write this.

Any thought about continuing with it?

Old-Crow

Hi,

First off, I like your story. It's good, and with some additional work, could be even etter.

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The following sentence that was in your story isn't one that you want to use.

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Later after the sorting and stuff because I can't write a good song

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For the sake of discussion, let's say that you either can't/don't want to take the time to write a song. So what? Don't advertise the fact.

Simply start your paragraph, "After the sorting had taken place..." There's no reason to highlight a weakness in your own story.

With respect to scene breaks, they are quite useful and should be used.

I use ... - ... in my stories. It's quick to type, doesn't get mistaken for a word and isn't visually distracting.

Two final suggestions for you - author notes are distracting and serve as a poor crutch. Your tale doesn't need them. If you have something that we need to know, put it into the body of the story.

Finally, never be afraid to re-edit and re-post chapters. It's one of the nicer featureas about writing on a fan site like this - you get feedback from readers and have the opportunity to fillow-up with it.

All the best,

Old-Crow

great story keep up the good work

The 'legends' about the basilisk are WRONG. It can be killed by the crowing of a rooster. And no canon info states that brain-destruction is the only way to kill them. They aren't zombies for god's sake!

As for the mirror-gaze thing- thats an interesting idea.

It isn't ever specified whether the 'murderous stare' causes instant death to just humans or not...

I suspect the basilisk would be self-immune, or it'd likely have killed itself leaving the bathrooms (filled with mirrors) at some point.

Then again, you're writing AU and may be taking those liberties.

Just like the other AU writers who arbitrarily hand a character super-powers with no specified causal reason!

Harry wasn't bitten by a genetically modified spider! He wasn't overloaded with magical radation in an accident. The most impressive accidental magic he ever did was to inflate his aunt!

Like I said- You're writing AU. Your universe. Pleeeease make it somewhat realistic!

The basilisk doesnt exist inside the diary. Riddle does.

The snake existed since Salazar bred it there several hundred years ago. It lived in the chamber living of anything that ventured in there (the book mentions small animal bones).

Hhmmm. A month of detention for being late to a class, a month of detention for fighting...I'm sensing a rut here. That and a certain lack of perspective.

Few things more satisfying than a righteous target to beat on.