please more of this stories

anti mary sue

and all that

maybe more or another pls

You should make a sequel about their children!

Short. Corny. Uninaginative. An incredibly beautiful protagonist that would end wars and captivate the heart of anyone. Her tragic past doesn't make me sympathize with her nor does her current situation because it reminds me of horrible Latin soap operas. If she was a princess or a plain girl with a brilliant personality I would have liked her more. The plot could have been better. It had excellent elements but were poorly put into use. I commend you for making the canon characters funny yet in-characters. Pairing were excellent and ones that are generally accepted. This is a story I would read once. I would not recommend. And if I had discovered it sooner I would have not followed. It only entrances me at the beginning and then it falls. You say your strong point is romance yet all I see is a love that is based on physical attractions and pretty words. Gaara looks fr someone to be by his side and be loyal to him. Neji is the same but will prefer her to be strong minded. Sasuke needs someone to guide him. Saifia could had been all these of she had more personality. For a person that has live alone for years, kills her family and is a jinchuriki; she is weak. At first presented as a strong modes woman she changes into a weakling I do not have much pity for because I her 'the world has come
to an end' and 'without Gobi I am nothing' that I do not find emotional but rather that like a bad actor.

All in all. This story needs to be revamped and revised.

*grins*

I loved this story! Especially all the times they picked on Naruto..or Gaara...*snickers*

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Hidan is from Yugakure. Village in the hot springs or something like that.

HA! HA! HA! HA! HA! HA! HA! HA! HA! HA! HA! HA! HA! HA! HA! HA! HA! HA! HA! HA! HA! HA! HA! HA! HA! HA! HA! HA! HA! HA! HA! HA! HA! HA! HA! HA! HA! HA! HA! HA! HA! HA! HA! HA! HA! HA! HA! HA! HA! HA! HA! HA! HA! HA! HA! HA! HA! HA! HA! HA! HA! HA! HA! HA! HA! HA! HA! HA! HA! HA! HA! HA! HA! HA! HA! HA! HA! HA! HA! HA! HA! HA! HA! HA! HA! HA! HA! HA! HA! HA! HA! HA! HA! HA! HA! HA! HA! HA! Oh my god! I am freaking in LOVE with this chapter! You should know why, 'nough said.

Hah, hah! Pretty funny how now gaara is the voice of reason and logical thinking versus a mindless, instinctual, animal-like jinjuriki considering his, shukaku, was one of the most determined to take full control over his host bringing agar to near insanity.

Omg! This is so cute, but I'm caught between wanting this to be a neji oc fix and a gases oc fix even though I know it's a gases oc fix.

Is it sad that I'm not surprised Sasuke betrayed them? Hmm, and now Sakura's in labor . . . what a development this is.

Great job!

Sincerely,

TalaTheWolf

Yay! :D Now we know for sure Safaia loves Gaara. Now we just need to get her and Sakura back . . .

Great job!

Sincerely,

TalaTheWolf

Hmm, interesting. I know Neji loves her, but Safaia doesn't seem that happy. Everyone wants her to be with Gaara and know Neji would do well with TenTen. And now Gaara has disappeared. It definitely has not gone as Sakura planned, it seems.

Good job, lots of drama!

Sincerely,

TalaTheWolf

I love the bets between the guys at the end. Great chapter, very amusing!

Sincerely,

TalaTheWolf

Hmm, I wonder what Safaia was thinking when she 'rejected' Gaara . .. Naruto and Sakura are so silly. I wonder what they are up to?

Great job!

Sincerely,

TalaTheWolf

Yay! Safaia can see. This is an interesting development.

Great work!

Sincerely,

TalaTheWolf

It's interesting to see Gaara's veiwpoint of himself. He needs to learn he isn't bad!

Did those guys remove the five-tails from Safaia? It will be interesting to see what happens next.

Sincerely,

TalaTheWolf