At this point i feel like this is a Draco/Ginny story more than a H/Hr story. I was really looking forward to a Slytherin Harry and Gryffindor Hermione story because its so rare but you just skip and skip further into the relationship and give very little moments between the two .

This was an interesting introduction for Hermione. I liked it very much.

I always wondered why those Weasley idiots never just shrunk down their trunks especially when en route like a pack of bad clowns to the station.

Wow this story needs a beta reader. There continue to be (easily overlooked, I guess) typos that spell check would have missed - they're words, but they're the wrong words.

Is Harry constipated? He acts like it. It's not like Hermione didn't have the same colored eyes when he let Draco bully her on the train ride up in first year...

I'm enjoying this story but I'm also feeling the lack of background material. I hope future chapters show what life was like for Harry in bits before Hogwarts, his sorting and reactions to it, what his OTHER 5 YEARS were like at Hogwarts, etc...? One can hope otherwise this is going to feel painfully incomplete. However: onwards!

Um, Hermione? Harry was an asshole and let Little Bitch Malfoy treat you like shit. Aim a little higher for your romance, sweetie.

Really? A freaking stunning spell! If you want us believe that Harry is the so well trained smart and powerful student you've been describing him, then you've failed.

Sorry but the part when Harry couldn't tell Hermione that he loves her was just bullshite.

Great

Brilliant

I understand that in Western countries children and teenagers have sex straight out of birth... However, do you think that it is not too fast? I remember beeing quite young myself. Maybe I was too much in studies and etc..., but having sex at age 16-18 wasn't that widely practiced. When I read HP storries, some authours tend to put Harry with someone in sex relations in age 13 already. Well, here we have the boy almost at 17 and the girl at almost course, sex is good, but I like mostly slow approach and mostly romantic side of relations in books.

Nice

Good

I love these slytherin Harry stories. Especially ones where we jump forward a few years and he starts to befriend others. Also, you do a good job of character interaction and laying out the scene, though a little more time spent in each one wouldn't hurt.

The part that kills this story though is how smitten Harry Potter is with Hermione. It's a great pairing, but in no way, shape or form does it remotely make sense with regard to your story at this point. I'll highlight the following problems with the way it has been introduced:
-Harry is in his 6th year and barely even recognizes someone he's shared classes with for the last 6 years?
-After apparently not even paying enough attention for 5 years to notice this girl who often raises her hand in class (again for 5 years) he suddenly catches her eye at random in the dining hall and he just stares off in his own world?
-He's completely mesmerized by her "chocolate brown eyes" for the first time ever even though he didn't even know she existed at any point in the previous 5 years they shared classes together.

I'm sorry if that comes across as harsh, but this is by far the weakest point of your story.

It looks like he takes her by storm. Sort of take over and no objections... No flames so far, but I will continue to read. Maybe he is just too occupied by his destiny

I don't really have a sense of the characters in this story. It's obviously just the opening chapters, so hopefully I'll soon have a more solid grasp. I'm pumped to have found a story of yours with this many available chapters.

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