wow. that really just took my breath away. great way to start a story; i really liked how you did Aslan and the Pevensie's father together. very beautiful in general

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Lucy was perfect. She is light. The same way that Peter is a rock, and Edmund a protector. It's her name.

I also really liked how you finished this off.

-Dyslexic Nerd

That last line made me crack up! It's so very true, Ed seems to need to learn everything first hand, but he'll remember it forever, and never repeat a mistake. Quite nicely done.

-Dyslexic Nerd

It's so sad, Susan's fate. And the duolougue almost seems a song if just set to the right tune.

-Dyslexic Nerd

That's sweet!

-Dyslexic Nerd

Lovely! Keep up the good work!

This is GOOD! Now write one for their mother.

Great Job!

Aww, this piece is really, really sweet. I love the image of Mr. Pevensie, fighting in WWII, lying in the hospital but dreaming of Aslan and his children. The scenes are really nice, and I love how both Aslan and their dad are watching over them. Keep up the great work!

At first I thought it had been miss labled and should have ended up in the story section. What a wondreful surprise! My favorite part is the end- it has an ending but it also leaves with you wondering what happens next. Questions like these:

What happend to their father in our world?

Was he (the father) saying all this aloud and the doctors could also here (and wonder)?

Did the father make it back to our world?

Don't answer these. The poem has a beautiful 'cliffhanger' (almost) kind of endin. Leaves you full yet wondering.

BEAUTIFUL! C. S. L. would be proud!

Hi! Um, I wrote a review of this a while back on The Lion's Call, so it probably didn't get to you. So here it is:

Wow. I will never forget "Never Forget". _ You did a wonderful job writing this piece. It's not just a poem; it's a glimpse into a father's heart and a taste of the love he has for his children. I loved the way Aslan and the father were both watching them grow and learn. It reminds you that we don't just have a blood-related dad; we also have a Heavenly Father. The words spoken were just BEAUTIFUL, the imagery was good...everything about it was incredible. Good job, Sirenwriter! I LOVED it! :-D

Wow. This was so beautiful. One of the best fanfics I've ever read. I loved how you intertwined Mr. Pevensie with Aslan and how they both described the children so accurately. This brought tears to my eyes! This goes right to my favorites. Outstanding job! :)

This is awesome! You did an amazing job! You did very good with Susan and captured her personality wonderfully! Also, very good job with Lucy!(she's my favorite) You did a very good job! God bless!

wow very inspirational! its really smooth and nice. I like the way u bring in the happenings with a poem. when i read it i could hear the beach and the kids laugh i mean really hear it its really good. u have a good way of bringing ideas and a picture from letters. keep it up girl! ur doing awsome!

aw, what a sweet ending! this is one of my all time fav fics! thank you so much for wrighting this! you did a wonderful job!

don't ever stop wrighting! :)

What a beautiful ending! I love that Mr. Pevensie recovered and went home. That's exactly what I wanted to happen!