Oh my God! That's amazing! I absolutely love it! 3

i loved it.

SO much.

(:

well done.

loved it! i hope you will write more of these!

:-)

This is meant in a constructive way. I think the base idea of your story was nice. But I think you should work on developing your sentences and pargraphs. Quite a lot of the time it felt more like a running commentary. You were 'telling', not 'showing'. You also need to either check your spelling/read through more carefully, or find someone to beta read for you. Please don't think I'm trying to be mean. I think you have the basis of good writing, otherwise I wouldn't offer advice.

I like the touches... I do hope there is more.

i like it very much, well done!

Aww. That was sad yet good. And aw. Bellatrix and Lucius and I loved it!

That was the first Lucius/Bellatrix story I've read and I loved it . Awesome Work Jessie! I absolultley adored it ;

Lisa-Marie

I loved the ending! Such a great twist! It's perfect!