Don't like this one as much, but I suppose if it was longer that could change.

*bangs head on imaginary desk* Wow. I think Veela's effect people just by reading about them.

Not really and that sounded way better in my head, but you've gotten another fake star from me.

I hate you. And love you. And then hate you again. It's strange how many OCs you can come up with for different stories. Er... strange in a good way.

Oh god. I like this one too.

I like this one too, as well as the very first.

I'm confused. Are these just added onto whenever you feel like it? Meaning are the chapters (like this one) updated?

This is a good start to what seems to be a very interesting story. I like Dawn's character and her sister is very cute as well. I hope you write more than just one chapter for this story, because you left me wanting to read more! Great job and please write more.

I'm lost of words. Your Story is more than Fantastic. Please continue it as soon as possible.

I'm lost of words. Your Story is more than Fantastic. Please continue it as soon as possible.

Great story. I think the technical term for her is naga.

Sweet names! Taking Latin for the 5th year, I'm always excited about the translations of the Latin or Scientific names. XD So cool! How did you come up with your character(s)? Love the names - and Latin and Greek rock!

Keep up the excellent writing...I look forward to seeing what else comes up since apparently Crotalus isn't yet finished with mutating. I look forward to other mutant's reactions. :D

You've set up your character rather nicely! Her powers are believable and well defined. . Can't wait to see what you do with her in the future!

Cool story! Update soon.

Maid of the Mer

. She seems very real, not perfect woman and that is always extremely refreshing.

very intriguing!

I like the subtle humor that is threaded through out. .

This Donovan guy sounded rather interesting...too bad he died within the first chapter though... *weep*