Like how the restaurent's going, and if you ever continued this, I'd be a happy reader. If not, well, some stories were meant to scrap. Not that I'd consider this as one of them, but that's really your choice...

I liked the magical timelapses for no apparent reason. And Angel's a great narrator- she has a way of seeing something in everything.

Nice story!

hehe, roger burned the soup.

lol.

~CArly

"I need hair-care products, Collins! Have you SEEN my split ends?" Roger shoved some of his hair into Collins' face. "Look, the split ends have their own split ends! SOMEONE thought film was more important than shampoo and conditioner! Now I'll need some serious hair therapy!"

so funny!

"First you..." she yawned "Get me up, and now..." Another yawn "You make me look like shit..."

lol

i know this chapter is supposed to be kinda sad, but i found that line really funny. good job!

update soon!

a-dor-a-ble! whipped cream and caramel and mini waterfalls!...well, that sounds really dirty.

Angel's very cute here!

"So..." I say, "What kind of restaurant is it gonna be?"

"Umm..." Angel replies, "The food kind? I dunno!"

"It has to have something special, so that people will want to come eat here; it can't just be generic," I tell her.

"Well," Collins says, "Maybe we should think of a name first, then base it around it!"

"No, that's stupid!" Maureen answers. "You have to name the restaurant after you decide what it's like!"

We argue for a while, until Mark cuts in. "I know the name," he says loudly, and we settle down. "Benny's."

"Yeah!" Roger says. "Then maybe people will think we're Denny's!"

"I know," Maureen shouts, stepping up onto the table, "It can be a form of protest against Denny's and their cheaply-made food! We can be the anti-Denny's!"

"That's a great idea!" Angel says. "We can make it look like Denny's... but not! Like, total opposite but still recognizable!"

"You guys," I say, "They could sue us for copyright infringement!"

"Well, we got enough money," Roger replies, "To counter the sueingness and stuff!"

"'Sueingness and stuff?'" Mark chuckles. "Very eloquent, Rog..."

"I'M NOT AN ELEPHANT!" Roger yells. Mark pats his shoulder comfortingly.

"Relax Rog, I said 'eloquent' not 'elephant.'" He smiles as Roger calms down, then blushes as he realizes that his hand is still on Roger's shoulder. He removes it quickly, and everyone laughs.

i loved all of that! it was just AWESOME! and i also loved the "the boys - and Angel" thing!

aww, poor Benny!

Haha. "Special Beer". Update son!

"I'M NOT AN ELEPHANT!" Roger yells. Mark pats his shoulder comfortingly.

Roger is so hilarious! LOL

"I need hair-care products, Collins! Have you SEEN my split ends?" Roger shoved some of his hair into Collins' face. "Look, the split ends have their own split ends! SOMEONE thought film was more important than shampoo and conditioner! Now I'll need some serious hair therapy!"

HAHAHAHAHAHA!

whee cuteness.

"He does sometimes say he has an affinity for whipped cream and caramel, though, but I... won't go into that subject."

oh angel knows ALL about that.

updatesoon!

"Well, we got enough money," Roger replies, "To counter the sueingness and stuff!"

"'Sueingness and stuff?'" Mark chuckles. "Very eloquent, Rog..."

"I'M NOT AN ELEPHANT!" Roger yells. Mark pats his shoulder comfortingly.

Silly Roger!

This is getting VERY good. So update before I explode!

Um, since Mimi doesn't exist is this story eventually going to be MarkRoger? Also, is everything going to be from someone's POV? I think it was better written when it was in the third person... Anyway, the story looks like it will build into being a lot of fun _

nice work :) i like it

"Benny's"! YAY!

Wait...was it me, or was Mimi not in this?