This is cool.

This story has so much potential. It's really sad that it has not been. Please consider returning to it.

Again, I didn't understand much

No offence, but I barely understood a thing. Also, you made some mistakes:
Elion is Elyon, and Blanc is Blunk

I thought it was " gurdians unite!"

wtf is happening!?

great story can you do the names of the Sailor scouts when their not transformed with the american names, thanks lov ya, Hasta la vista

i like that

it is very good keep writing

try to describe more

This is a great story. But, you need work on some punctuation and spelling. And after someone says something then say who said it! Otherwise, the dialogue will be confusing.

And another thing. You seem to be going by the show(for WITCH). The correct transformation phrase is "Guardians Unite!" It's not all the random phrases from the comics.

I'm sorry if I seem a little demanding, but it constantly disappoints me when people are saying that they're going by the show, yet use stuff from the comics and vice versa.

Oh! I really like this! Keep up the good work! :D