"...traced his hand over the bumps, feeling soft, moist wetness on his fingertips. He dug further into his brain, breaking the nerves..."

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*pushes plate of food far away* I'm not hungry anymore...

Yandere!Manjoume, huh? Now that's scary. xD Don't EVER humiliate Manjoume Thunder. Ever. Especially if you're his lover.

Uhhh.

Oh dear.

Well, Chazz is a nut, so...

I feel like this could have been better had things been elaborated on more. First, Fubuki's interest in dressing up Manjoume like a doll. Then, I feel like Manjoume's motivations for murder should've been explored more before it happened. Believing it to the point of it driving him crazy enough to not even hear his own boyfriend out could've worked better if there had been a reason written for it; showing signs that he was insane to begin with, for example. I guess maybe you just needed...more, for this story to work.

I read this late night yesterday , but i only choice now to review it , Mainly because i can't get it out of my head and it is driving me mad.

It is mostly the murder scene which wont leave me alone , usually i can deal with gory stuff , but i have finally found a fanfic writer who can make my stomach go ... CONGRATULATION You have made it in to my book of GREAT WRITERS

So yeah just thought i let you know, loved it!

oh my gg how could yoou do that to fubuki, he was the best! you better redeem him right now, it's just too sad! oh, and tyr judai and fubuki they are nice together

ow but i loved it

Oh... my... god...

I reread the murder scene... 10... freaking... times...

GOOD GOD... That was WONDERFUL! So gory and so graphic and- and it was CUTE!

"He gently parted the field of yellow threads, distantly noting that his lover’s blonde hair clashed wonderfully with red."

That was wonderfully unexpected and wonderfully written! This is definitely the best fanfic I've read in the past 2 months!

And it was certainly the most creative fanfiction I've EVER read! That-that was lovely and terrifying...It reminds me of The Tell-Tale Heart.

Pure. Fucking. Genius.

I loved how Manjyome displays a certain innocence throught the story, making it all the more beautiful when he moves to the other extreme. I adored the last italicized paragraph. The adjectives used give Manjyome's actions a certain tenderness (e.g he gently parted the field of yellow threads...), but the actions contrast wonderfully. I have to say, your ending line was incredible. It summarises the story brilliantly, and i thinks it brings a certain element of humor to the situation.

And now, i only have one thing to ask: is it wrong that i was laughing at the end?

Welcome to Wonderland

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OH GOD BEAUTIFUL.

Truly makes me shiver whenever I read this story.

I think the first place I read this thought was on And when I tried to look for it again, I couldn't find it. Thankfully I found it here.

Wonderful job on this story!

Crepy...

And wen nyou think about it, given Chazz's somewhat instable mentality...that could happen if the situation arose. Very gory - perhaps a little TOO gory, but it worked okay. And definitely enough to make me squirm, which just doesn't happen to me. Ever.

ReaperRain

...i dont know what to say...

except that i almost threw up. the first few words were ok, but then i choked...i shouldnt hav kept reading

i'm feeling really queasy now

i'm just not a fan of manjyome and fubuki pairings.

that was...graphic...

not the greatest story i've every read. Sorry to say. But killing people just isn't my thing, i was definately suprised.

Oh god, this is one of the best stories EVER.

So descriptive, and..just wow.

Screw the people who diss it, if they don't like it, they should keep it to themselves.

But yes, this is BEAUTIFUL. ;D

The third time I read this story over. Gasp... that's disturbing (Manjyome's state of mental health that is). I read some of your other GX stories too and I can't believe how good you are switching from writing humourous stories to writing such a dark story and back to humour. Thumbs up.

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You...

Jackass...

WHORE!

What the fuck is wrong with you! Nothing in here is logical to any of the character's proper actions (except PERHAPS Manjoume killing Fubuki) and you spelled my beloved's name wrong! And another thing -Manjoume is NOT GAY! God, what's wrong with you jackasses? Got no real life to be in? Pathetic.

Note: Never, EVER, pose my beloved Burakku-san (that's Manjoume for you brainless idiots) as a gay whore-like beast.

The absolutely onle thing I find satisfactory is that Manjoume killed out of vengence, his own want and unecessary need for blood.

If you must write a story, block out the romance and stick to horror. That seems to be the only thing you're at all good at.

P.S.: If you don't like my "comment," don't come to me, 'cause I'll kill you the same way Burakku-san to Fubuki.

2nd P.S.: Manjoume's hiring Gaara to kill you and consume your blood. Heheheh...

...God...I think I'm gonna be sick...