I don't like how you've portrayed Sakura. You make her seem extremely weak and just useless. All she has done in your story is cry and beg. It bugs me how sad you made her out to be. The plot is ok but your story lacks proper development

I love protective Saske. Also I’m glad he didn’t kill him. He’s a little bitch but he doesn’t want to kill his friends

THAT BITCH

First of all, it's Orochimaru not Orachimaru. And the plot seems alright, but you need to work on your grammar

YASSSSSSS HALLALUJAH

I agree with you that she wouldn't win, but... SERIOUSLY! PLEASE DON'T MAKE HER WEAK AND CRY LIKE THAT! As much as I love her character, I hate seeing her weak!

Arrrgggghhh I hate it how she's strong, then suddenly degrades. MAJORLY.

FUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUCCCCCCCCCCCCCKKKKKKKKKKK YOOOOOOOOOOUUUUUU

Yassss! I absolutely LOVED Sakura's moment of empowerment towards the end. This was a great chapter

I don't like the way you write Sakura now! she's becoming annoying again!

great story. loved it. made me cry and laugh. great job!

I love the endingtears of joy

This was such an amazing story! I loved every part of this! It's probably one of the best Sasusaku story I ever read and Sasuke was so in character! I just loved it! Thank you for taking your time to write such an amazing story!

FYI Teme doesn't actually mean bastard. It's just a super rude way of saying "you"

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I loved it ! It was amazing and everything was just like PERFECT! Everyone in character and just woooowwww ! Amazing work