Misspelled words:
Manufactuing should be manufacturing
scedual should be schedule

There's a few spelling errors

Could you tag for the Mary-Sue, please? There's an "OC" tag in the character slot. Some of us like to filter out such things.
It's considerate.

I loved the Jak series and am very glad you are going to rewrite your stories. Is there going to be some things about Mass Effect in it and make it a crossover of sorts?

Work on adding detail. Otherwise, good job

are you going to get around with double trouble? or have you forgot

Good chapters. Sorry I haven't read them: college is much harder than I thought it would be. Its the second week and I have four papers due tomorrow, so I have to make this fast.

I left off where Kristen killed Kor. Nice finishing chapter, and it seems reading my story has made you leave even worse cliffhangers. What have I done, :P. The ending will make people interested want to read the second one. Keep up the good work, and good luck with the sequel.

COOL! cool! cool! cool!

I take slight offense to that quote of the week, yet for the most part that is my philosophy. Nice chapter, and I liked how you tied all of the lesser Metal-Head's life forces to Kor's.

Um, yeah, it's me again...

The one who flamed MA05. And instead of screaming back at me she has very politely told me some new information that has changed my view completely. So, I TAKE BACK EVERYTHING I SAID ABOUT THE PLAGIARISING! And I don't even know if that's how you spell it...

Anyway, I'm really sorry about it MA05. Forgive me? :(

Much better _

WHAT THE HELL ARE YOU DOING? HALF OF THIS IS COPIED FROM RED_MAGE04'S STORY RISEN DEMON! AS WAS THE LAST CHAPTER! Now I'm sorry, and I swore to myself that I would neveer flame some one, BUT THIS IS UNACCEPTABLE! How would you like it if soem one stole your hard work and claimed it as their own? And if you're one of those people who read the reviews and don't believe me, go see for yourself! MA05, you are what is classified as a PLAGIARIST! I was nice last time and sent a private message so no one else would realise (unless they figured it out too) BUT NOW YOU'VE GONE AND DONE IT AGAIN! Now if you'll excuse me, I'm going to go and sit in my little corner and fume some more...

HEY! Your using Quote of the week. My idea. Wait, you've been doing that for a while. Anyway, good chapter. I liked how the Baron redeems himself when he's ready to die for his city. Eagerly looking forward to Jak storming the nest, and I have only one request.

I don't mind helping fight scenes, I don't mind quotes of the week, but the Rules of Life are MINE (grabs list and looks around like Daffy Duck).

Cool chapter, nice and long. But yeah, I do have one question: Is Kristine Jak's sis or not? I'm getting myself confused!

Anyway, update soon!

So Kristine has power over Red Eco now? Me thinks there is even more resemblence between her and her brother now

Wait! You won't update for an entire month? Ok... But the next Chapter has to be good! (Aren't they all? LOL)