I really loved the metaphors and comparing Ritsu's, Seimei's control with shrines and greedy gods on separate shores, luring Soubi. Those metaphors in the last paragraps seemed very deep and painted a vivid, fantastica imagery I loved that. The whole take on, how Soubi's life was fucked up and comparing his two masters was really intersting. I loved this. Thank you.

This is good, i've ome to the conclusion you're a very good writer.

Wow, just wow.

I like your take on the Seimei-Soubi-Ritsu sensei-thing. I really like the last line. Very deep.

Wow. *blinks* lol, I was listening to a perfect sad song while reading this (wasnt planned) and it just added the sadness. I really liked the last like two sentences - it brought like a creepyness to it. Great Job.