Were's Dean?

very intense story

HOLY SHIT (pardon the french) I LOVE beyond Love this story. Not because of the rape or the abuse that Rory had to endure before finally telling an adult she truly trusted. I loved it for the writing style how each chapter made me want to keep reading. It's been a while since I've read a story with this amount of good writing when it came to Gilmore Girls! Please keep up the good work!

That was amazing. Is there a sequel?

OMG this story is amazing. I was on the edge of my seat the entire time I was reading it.

This whole thing just seems very out of character. Max, while I didn't like him in the series, isn't the type of person to abuse a child, and if he were (for plot-purposes) to abuse Rory, it would be different. ‘Time for the fun to start’ is not only out of character for him, but it seems to be a very cliched, generalized version of an abuser. It's lacking depth. Also, Rory is very, very intelligent and incredibly close with her mother. I just can't see her buying Max's reasoning.

You have talent as a writer, you just don't seem to have a grasp on these specific characters in this chapter.

I really liked this story! :D it was crazy intense and i loved the ending! good old luke, you can always count on him :)

great story!

Hey I really loved this story. I'm going to read the sequel next. This was good. You had some good ideas for the plot too. Kudos. (I hope I'm using that right lol)

May I be blunt? I'll be blunt. Blunt is what I do.

Your mechanics are awful . . . like nails on a chalkboard. Your paragraph breaks, your descriptions . . . ick! And you rely too much on dialogue.

Good news? You're a good storyteller. A very good storyteller. And you write speech incredibly well.

Here's the deal. I'd like to beta this story, if you're up for a rewrite. Let me know.

great story,i think you planned it out really well.

-miss bookworm

good job!

Wow. So I just read thw whole thing in one sitting. Overall a very very good story. It was well written with good diologue and enough description to make it easy to picture in my head.

I do think that your story would have benefited a litte from some reasearch. I know fanfiction writters don't want to be worried about keeping stories realistic, but there were a few things that caught my attention that distracted me from the overall story. Chlamidia, for example, can't be detected from a blood test. And the hospital wouldn't have let Rory leave until the police arrived. Other than that your story was excellent and I will be reading the sequel.

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your story was awsome! i have never loved such a story! i wish that was the episode i'm glad that you made a second one.

Is it like the end of your WHOLE story, or that chapter? I hope you dont end it! I like your stories! Just let me know please! :)

luved ur story and i'm gettin ready to read the sequel lol ur a great writer :D