Dug through garbage to find this old gem. The way you write combat is awesome. Do you still write, btw?

Wow this was awesome. I am surprised I hadn't run into this yet I am always cruising the FFTA archives but I am glad I found it now. This is an excellent oneshot. Very well written and I loved the description in this story. Even though I know it shall not be so it would be great of another oneshot where to sneak its way into the new story column.

Stay Frosty man!

Peace Out BigDragun style.

1) Intense. That's all I have to say.

Oh. My. God. This is definetly one of teh BEST FF:TA fanfics out there. Make a continuation! Make another part! I wanna see either Llednar or Marche die, or at least some kind of final battle. :D Llednar killed Montblanc! *cries*

I will NOT turn around... I will NOT turn around...

I turned around, darnit!

I laughed out loud at the "teddy bear pajamas" bit.

Alright, I finally got about to reading this story! And, what can I say, I'm very impressed! You managed to keep an extremely serious air the entire time without it becoming tiring (though I have to say, the number of Llednar's evil grins did become slightly high). But now for the full review-iness:

This story shows a definite flare for action scripting among other things, something I haven't been able to see from your other work so far. I likes it, and I can't wait to see the characters in Dark Dreams getting into some big-time, serious fights.

Er, I had some issues with the several cliched scenes in the story. You know, the dark sillhouette blocking out the stars in the doorway, details being lit up by sporadic lightning. Sorry, it's just that the cliches annoy me a bit.

Okay, the whole bit with Montblanc there, uh, yeah, I THINK he died, but I'm not sure. It wasn't completely clear in every way. I mean, did he get his neck broken, or what? Ah well.

Nnkay, other negative thing to add (sorry, I have to do it, it's a critique), but there were a few instances when you used the same word twice too close together. Like here:

((He swung the sword down off his shoulder, feeling the weight and feel of the blade and grip.))

Sorry, just saying that it's a bit annoying, you know, feeling the feel.

But still, I love the story. So, SO much. I have to say that it's amazing, and a great ending, too. Though I do understand that this is a oneshot, and it won't get a sequel, still, I'm gonna say it:

I WANT MORE!

See you.

Icey the Fox

Oh, lovely, lovely, lovely! That was amazing! I'm so glad to find a good FFTA writer; one who writes Llednar is a double plus. (Llednar is my favorite character.) You managed to capture the essence of both characters in a remarkable way, and your description was breathtaking. I was holding my breath during the entire fighting scene- gotta love the acrobatics! I also loved the way you portrayed Llednar and Marche; Llednar looks so delicate compared to some of the more brawny sterotypical guards, but he's got that colossal strength packed inside of him like a coiled spring. This has to be one of the most awesome stories I've ever read!

I always knew Lledner was stronger than he looks. Can you post another oneshot with Llednar meeting his end?

Woot! Now that's what I call a awesome story! I really do hope that you consider continuing it though, because I mean, it truly is awesome. The choice is yours Sage, but remember: Llednar's watching...

Won't you please continue this to a chapter fic? It could be even better that way. Because this way it just seems unfinished, I mean they vowed to fight eachother again, and you just gotta write about that.

Oh. My. God. Kupo.

You dedicated this whole thing to me? Holy smokes! I... I don't know what to say. I guess I'll have to make a fic and dedicate it to you in return.

But 'nuff of that.

I really can't belive that you put yourself down all the time, even though you write some of the most incredible work in the section. I mean, it must take true talent and experience to write something like this. And no, I'm not just saying that because this fic is dedicated to me. I'm saying this because it's true. The detail, the fight-scenes, everything, was top-notch.

In fact, the only errors I found were one or two spell mistakes (I think), and that's about it. But don't you dare let that get to you!

Thanks, kupo, and just wait... Soon there'll be a fic in the FFTA section with your name under the dedication. That is, if Llednar doesn't get me first, kupo.

Good job.