I wonder if Ash will be brought back... Or who the 'Master'is...

This is a great story honestly, I realize you might not be writing this anymore but you really should consider having someone finish this, it's quite engaging and you write the whole 'legendaries as humans' quite well.

If you don't plan on finishing this, would you mind me asking for you to PM on who the 'master' is? Or how you planned this fic to end...? If you don't want to, that's fine it's just...I really like the story.

Thank you for the great read. ;)

“Legends on Earth: Chapter Five: Shopin' Distress”

Aren’t I reading chapter six?

I couldn’t help thinking I was reading filler here. I mean... these legendaries have some serious matters on their minds, and the most important thing in their lives is shopping for clothes. While it made for an enjoyable read (because, of course, shopping for clothes /can/ be fun, and the awkwardness in this chapter made it fun too, there was definitely alot to be desired from the subject material. The entire chapter could’ve been summed up in a few paragraphs and allowed the bulk of the story to progress. I still liked the way that Kirby and Aile got along with each other... still liked the way all the characters behaved, really.

As far as a summary of the three chapters I’ve read on my own, I really liked it. It was fun to read, although it did tend to sometimes lean too heavily on the dialogue to keep it going. I’m quite interested in what happens next... I hope these legendaries can get their bodies back!

I didn't like this one quite as much as the previous one. That wasn't to say it was bad... it was still quite an enjoyable read so far as this story goes. Worlds better than the first few things we read. I think the issue here was that you were trying to imitate the anime. While the impression was a pretty successful one, I don’t know if you had the skill quite yet to attempt something so complicated from a writing perspective. Your modern work could probably do it with ease, but... this chapter had several clichés and a rather shoehorned pairing (if you count the anime as cannon), but overall I still liked it alot and didn’t have to stop reading during any point. The writing was fluid and kept me interested, although there are still points with too many words or too little description.

I really liked this chapter. I think it was the imagery... I love the sea, and I love the moon, so put them together... very pretty. And Aile didn't hurt the whole picture much, either. I like the way you present her mentality, I found it very believable and easy to swallow, even if I don't much like the idea of taking a legendary's legendary away. I kinda like how Kirby can tell what the legendary is by looking in its eyes, as it reminds me a little of the gift... or the little bit of it that everybody's got. Excellent chapter. I definitely prefer reading about people who aren’t in the anime. Your descriptions of OCs and their actions seem much more... real? Believable? I dunno.

interesting. needs an update. 12/10. faved & alerted.

Here are my questions. 1. What is this fanfic about? 2. What locations are being used in the fanfic? 3. When does it take place? 4. How old is anyone in the fanfic? 5. Is the Giovanni in the fanfic, the same one from the anime or somewhere? 6. Besides Giovanni, who all is in the fic? Be sure to let me know.

You took like two or three months to update your story!C'mon don't make us wait.

WOOT! Great story! I blazed through all the chapters in one day! Keep it up!

You have a great writing style, great grammar and vocab, and a great plot! I can't think of anything to critizise! It would be great to see a little romance, though.

Lol, you know about lucid dreaming too?

ugh, that would be painful, especialy for a ho-oh, being flying, and fire.

this is a very good story, please update quickly, im lovin it

i love the plot so far; what about the other legendary Pokemon? will they appear in the story soon?

wow Legend Thunder seems like a great guy*gives two thumbs up*.hey when r we gonna know if M2 is alright?ima big fan and i'm dying to know what ahppend to him

Great job! I didn't notice much cussing though. Maybe Elton cusses when he is not 'on screen'

This is interesting already.

How come you haven't been giving us more on the situation with Mewtwo? Or the other Legendaries, that I assume were also hit? And What about Ash? Since he's still travleing, but knows about Ho-oh, would he try to meet the others and help them out?

UPDATE SOON

oh the blonde dude whos following them is first i thought it was Zapdos(whom it probaly is).but its one of them i know

Well, I'm glad to see these chapters are longer than the others! I really liked the scene with Archie and Maxie. Thank you for keeping their character developments from the end of Ruby and Sapphire (not wanting to expand the sea or land)! And who is this light haired boy? I'm guessing he's Kyogre and his captured sister is Groudon. But I'm just going by his description, so who knows if I'm right? And that would mean Kyogre is dead if I am! D: