Great story a shame you stopped it

very good and my brain hurt from trying to figure it out

maybe he was trying to say that she has great strength

hmph those bastards deserve to be destroyed after what they did to naruto

very good though i took your advice and skipped it

naru tayu naru tayu naru tayu now now niow now

hey loved the naru tayu scene man it waspretty nice

can you please explain to me what the shadow dragon is

ha ha wow poor naruto and haku better not be gay man

and is this story still up for adoption

wow very good and incredibly likely after all the entire series sprang from that day

i hear this is up for adoption oui

I note that you have an unfortunate tendency to do too much speech with no details in between. I mean, if you look at this chapter (3), most of the lines begin with someone talking, responding or whatever.

It's not terrible, but reading this I get the sensation that it's all very rushed. There's no real pauses between conversation, which destroys any sort of tension/anticipation. It reads rather like a radio script.

alligators taste good fried

Instead of relying on votes why not do a Harem. I mean Naruto is becoming demon and you figure lust of the flesh would be a factor and it's far more convient. I mean why does he have to be limited to just one girl? When your dark or evil or along those lines do you really care about stuff like that?

story is good so far abd why don't you do both karin and tayuya

it would be great you don't have to it's just an idea oh and try to make the chapters longer and put the fox in some seans

luv da story man keep it up plz hurry up and continue