Excellently done! A few errors, mixed words etc. The story is great & a must read!

I like this story but harry is very OP and cliche. However i like this type of HarryLuna thanks for the story! -

You have some excellent ideas and some unique plot twists that I really enjoyed. However, your English skills need some strict attention. One cat: cat. More than one cat: cats (NOT cat's). One Potter: Potter. More than one Potter: Potters (NOT Potter's). There are NO apostrophes in pluralizations. This is Primary School English you need to review. Belonging to one Potter: Potter's. Belonging to more than one Potter: Potters' (or Potters's). The possessive requires an apostrophe (with a few exceptions: his, hers, ours and theirs).

Not only do you not know how to use an apostrophe, you can apparently not differentiate between homonyms; their/there/they're, to/too/two, and your/you're are just a few you have regularly misused.

Also, proper nouns (ie. Harry, Ravenclaw, Professor) need to be capitalized, every time.

Please do not take my constructive criticism as a slight on your storytelling. You have talent for bringing your own characterizations to an imaginative plot line, and further grammatical editing can only improve your writing.

Thank you for your contribution to the world of Harry Potter Fan Fiction.

So.. I get that Harry is smarter because of the 'time-travel' aspect and the hermit part. But I do not see the logic in Luna being a few months into her first year and is able to do the same thing as him regarding the Ministry tests. And I feel like it all flops, becomes banal, after Dumbledore, Molly, Ron and Ginny are dealt with. Plus I felt like they were dealt with extremely early in the storyespecially Dumbledore. For someone who has been manipulating for at least 60 years, he went down easythe public opinion of him would normally not change so quickly and easily, him being the 'Leader of the Light, Defeater of Grindewald', et cetera. Also, as I said before, as someone who has been manipulating that long, you would think he would be a lot better at covering his tracks, altering the evidence (especially with him having magic). I'm sorry, but, while I appreciate all the changes/improvements that you are getting Harry to make in the Wizarding and Muggle worlds, there is just too much banality and lack of character development (which is hard to do when your character is 12 and has passed tests that are for adults) and a distinct feeling of a lacking, repetitive storyline in the chapters following Molly, Ron and Ginny's incarceration.

U r simply BRILLIANT.

Ur view, thoughts, concept n most importantly ur maturity as an author shined brightly without a doubt.

The plot , summary, story-line, concept, progress with each chp, twist n turns, writing, charater play n scenes n many more things were done very very nicely...

I loved it

PS. M ur fan

I liked the LOTR references

I quite liked this chapter mainly with your focus on the Dursleys.

toke took

GOOD STORY AND I SUPPORT YOU IN THIS

I agree

I read the first chapter...or 1-5 as you call it and I'm absolutely disgusted...Like if you're going to make a !SuperHarry story at least write it well so people can over look that and don't just add powers and money and titles and lordships like they grow on trees...this story is fucking STUPID!

Have you never wondered WHY you've written more than 100,000 words over a period of SIX bloody years and you only have like 200 reviews? It's cause your story is crap and you don't know how to make it even semi-believable in the HARRY BLOODY FUCKING POTTER universe...How fucking BAD does your writing have to be for it to seem farfetched in a universe where MAGIC is real? lmfao well you're probably going to ignore this and think I'm and asshole...welllllll I AM an asshole, but I digress...

I assume the later chapters are better as I hope you've matured mentally and your writing style has improved after SIX bloody YEARS lol...really this garbage took you SIX years? you really should have dedicated your time to something else hahahahah

Sorry for the flame, but once I pick a story to read, I always read through at a minimum the first chapter of any story no matter how bad. So I HAD to read through your first chapter while I disliked your story from the nearly the top by the time i finished I hated it because I spent that much time reading something I disliked.

yours,

Mr. Annoyed

ps you can E-MAIL me just take the spaces out and add an AT symbol and a real PERIOD...thought I'd spell it out for you in case your logic is as bad as your writing ; ) hahah (johnnyblack1221 at ) that is if you WANT to respond to this lol

I too agree to the protest.

I was reading through, and how can Katherine be heir to all four founders, when it was stated in an earlier chapter that Hogwarts sensed the possibility that Lily & James could create the true Heir. Shouldn't she only be heir to some of them?

I REALLY like your story(despite Dumbledore-bashing, though I do agree that he was manipulative).

I absolutely love how Harry takes his fate into his own hands!

There are just two things that annoy me...

1. It's Blaise ZABINI, not Zambini.

2. There is a difference between they're(they are), their(possesive) and there(usually an indication of place). This also includes your and you're.

Despite the fact that I like your story these things are really bothering me, because, it shouldn't be such a difficult thing to write correct english. I mean, you're from an english-speaking country and I'm not and even I am annoyed by it!

But besides that, looking forward to next chapters.

Harry whipped his mouth? That must have been painful. Why would he do that? And Harry's table educate? Try etiquette.

Yes, you certainly needed a beta for this story. As for the story itself? I like aspects of it, but it's a bit too 'streamlined'. You cover a lot of territory, but it needs to be developed.

this is a pretty interesting fic. so odd thinking that harry's twelve. wishing there were more scenes with luna/harry. please update soooon