Perfect.
Everybody's POV, very original way of putting them !

Nyuh, sniff, so sad. Favourite line was "Promising her he won’t ever die" just because I can imagine what brought that on. Excellent ficlet. I particularly liked the way it was short, rather staccato repetitive sentences.

Lovely. With that simple last line, you carved it deeper and made it, for Ryan, about much more than Marissa's death. Deftly done. I also liked Seth promising Summer "he won't ever die"-so impractical and impossible and said with such fervor, just like Seth.

Thank you.

Yeah, why not? I'm glad you're putting some of these little "experimental" pieces up here. Apart from being always a joy (not sure that's the right word) to read, it also reminds me to check your fic lj.

It's just beautiful how you manage to give this clear picture of the aftermath in so few words. The different reactions of grief and protectiveness that the tragedy brings forth and where each person's focus lies is so right, that Summer, Julie and Ryan would be the grievers and the Cohens would instead have their focus on being there for the ones they love (maybe it could get Seth out of his two-year slump). This is like a dream setup for next season. Especially enjoyed the Sandy/Ryan interaction and this being the breaking point for Ryan for all the crap he's been through.

Looking forward to Best. Thanks for the heads up. It's probably a good idea to read up on it.

Great one shot.

Beautiful. I loved the style you wrote this in. The short sentences captured the harsh reality and bluntness that comes with death. I like how you kept the same structure of sentence for each segment.

I found Julie's segment especially heartbreaking. "This is how Julie buries her firstborn." The way you worded this really was effective. Instead of saying something softer like "this is how Julie says goodbye to her daughter" or "has her daughter's funeral", you stated what it was plainly and didn't try to euphonize the horror of the situation.

"In wails and sobs and misery". This line really made me blink away tears. Just so agonozing.

I too imagined Ryan sitting on the floor in a dark poolhouse the night of the death just completely emotionless and broken. I love how you ended the story and the description of Ryan's grief with an actual event.

"With a moment of pent up, all consuming, uncontrollable rage.

With a chair thrown through the pool house window.

With Sandy’s arms around him.

With a second of not being able to remember how to breathe.

With a quiet release of tears he’s been holding back since long before he met the Cohens."

Chilling, especially the last line, just because it is all so true and so Ryan to react in this way. I can only dream of a scene this good on the actual show.

The chair through the poolhouse window was a really nice touch. I could so see Sandy and Kirsten sitting in the kitchen and all of a sudden see a chair flying out the poolhouse and glass flying all over the place lol.

I also liked the bit about Kirsten thanking God it hadn't been one of her kids that died. Such a natural reaction of a parent.

I really loved this and I love your writing (as you could tell my by borderline psychotic response to your wonderful Windex lol. Thanks for the e-mail by the way.). I hope you write more stories regarding the aftermath of the season finale since it has such great potential and often comes off better in fic than it is dealt with on the acual show. Keep up the amazing work ;)

Loved The Julie one.

I like the style of the story - great work

Pretty good for drabble!

I actually came by to laugh at some OC Mary Sues to cheer myself up, but this is really good. Realistic and poetic.

Beautiful, heartwrenching and so very painful. The experiences of each character ring so true. A great emotional piece. Perhaps even something to build on?

Wow! That rocked!