This is amazing! I love it!

Wow. This fanfiction is a masterpiece. I've read fanfics that are better than the canon before, but this story is so much better that it almost makes me mad, because you put so much thought into these characters and what makes them tick while canon scrapes by with the bare minimum. Even in the places where I like the ideas introduced later in canon more it's just the ideas that I prefer, your execution leaves a clear winner.

My only real complaint is that the epilogue feels less like an ending and more like a stopping point. I can understand why, a thoughtful reader should be able to fill in the blanks for themselves and if you continued until the proper end of Organization XIII you would have started running into issues like retreading canon and the viewpoint character dying. But Aerlen's story made my heart ache and I would have loved to see Larxene's recruitment.

How could she be beaten... by a bunch of... losers?

Well, that's a pretty dark ending.
Anyway, this story was really cool. I enjoyed reading this very much, what with the theory and the philosophy and the great grammar and seeing things come together to the point they're at when canon comes in. Though, why not show when Larxene joins their ranks?
One thing in particular that I liked was that I found it funny when Xigbar decided to mess with... Demyx, I think, about what happened to his eye. "He pushes me down the stairs when he's bored. /And we have a lot of stairs!/", hahahaha! His other excuses were funny, too, but that one beats the rest.

This was beautiful. Absolutely stunning. I really wish this was canon. You do an excellent job developing these characters and giving them layers and depth. The KH series has become one gigantic, convoluted mess with all these asspulls and spinoffs, and I wish I could show this to the writers as an example of storytelling and character development done right. Fantastic job.

Wow. That. Was. Beautiful.

This story started a little slow for me, but am I ever glad that I kept reading beyond the first chapter or two. I LOVE your ideas for the origins of the Org. XIII members, everyone seems perfectly in character, and watching their transformation was awe-inspiring. Thank you so much for writing this vast work.

Now I need to get reading your one-shots...

Wow. Just wow. I don't know if I even have the words to describe just how amazing this story was.

Everyone was characterized so well, and all of their interactions and little behavioral habits/quirks made them seem so real and alive. The scientific viewpoint on their existence and how each of them changed over time was wonderful. Aerlen's character development, especially, throughout the course of the entire story was fascinating. Sad, but fascinating. So many bittersweet moments. Your choice of wording at moment was very powerful, and the implied significance left me with goosebumps many times. Even all these years later, this story fits very well into the series' plotline. It really is amazing.

A fitting and dramatic end to a great and fascinating story, bravo.

Wow. Loved this chapter. Loved the story. Seriously one of the most well-written stories I have ever read. It was really beautifully written, and I love that you explained basically everything (up until Roxas, but we already know about the details concerning him), and I especially liked your character development of Aerlen. (I'd say more, but I don't want to somehow spoil things if someone reads some of the reviews before finishing the story.) Now that the newer games are out and we know more details about certain members, I really must say I liked your ideas better, particularly Saix's past. Luckily, some members were not explained, so I'll just go with your version.

And I don't believe the story was complete last time I read it because I would have remembered this chapter otherwise. Once again, wow. This chapter was so...wow.

Another great chapter. I think Aerlen is an interesting addition to the story (I have a theory about her in my head; I'm curious to see if I end up being right) and you've made me rather attached to the Dusks, as well (with them picking up Even's pens and all that stuff). I also particularly enjoyed the interactions between the characters in this chapter.

I remember reading this in the past, and I liked it so much, I'm reading it again. You write very well. It's very descriptive.

Is it strange to feel that this is the most important chapter in the work as a whole?

What an interesting piece. You have a wonderful, vivd way of wording details.

Did you have someone specific in mind when Briag lost his eye? What were you thinking when you wrote this?

It took me until the fifth chapter to figure out that 'Aerlen' is a reverse anagram (or whatever you call it) of 'Larxene'. Also, I believe when Aerlen asks how she could make her Dusk stronger, it was foreshadowing for (possibly) her becoming Larxene later? I am slow LOL

it was awesome and i liked how you kept everyone in character and at the same time sympathethic despite them being villians and you didn't hand-wave any of their actions.

you gave us sympathy of the devil.