Bad, just bad. I stopped reading when psychic attack caused ships to crash into each other, they were in formation moving parallel to each other, space isn't fucking sea that can change your course. Spending so much time describing landings and take offs, with reusing canon names as descendants without any character didn't help either.

Fighters still don't have shields? Are there no advancements in technology after 5 centuries of available goa'uld/asgard and ancient tech? If there are no personal shields, nano suits and power armors I'm gonna freak out.

Eh, the missing commas in the dialogue are jerking me out of my headspace as I try to read. Makes it impossible to enjoy.

great world building. did you ever finish this somewhere? love the fact of vorlons talking to the trai like normal people, at least for Lovato see what would have happened when the shadows showd up.

great story thank you for writing it I wish you would of finished it

I only skipped though the chapters, which play in the Stargate universe. There were just too many original characters and hardly any canon ones in that part of the story. And as it plays in the future of the Stargate series, a lot of other things are also different. The war storyline with the Sinhindrea is also not so interesting.

But I loved the chapters in the Babylon 5 universe. Those were cool! The appeal of crossover stories is for me to see, how well known canon might change, when people from another series come to that universe. It is interesting to see, how familiar characters react to characters from a different series. In this case those Stargate characters are original ones, but a certain amount is fine. I just don't like fanfics so much, where practically all characters are original ones. It also helps to make a story more focused, if it plays in just one universe and not more at once.

still an entertaining read. though i'd like to point that an earth government naming an exploration vessel the Cortez is in rather bad taste. not too mention potentially awkward if the race they meet is aware of earth history. it would tend to make them instantly suspicious.

interesting beginning. though from a military standpoint, them not having any back up ZPM's doesn't make any sense. especially since you have them capable of making the things. the military is all about redundancies.

Why on Earth did you use the name Shepherd?

The worst character in history of RPG!

awesome story!, can't wait to find out what happens next :)

Excellent story

The premise of this story, or rather the reasons for staying hidden make no sense. There's intellegence then there's paranoia, the action of the Tau'ri are fully in the latter. What possible advantage could they gain from watching tech so far below them?

Very good story!

Good battle!

Good story so far. A few errors of note: There rather than their, fowled rather than fouled, weary rather than wary.