High school AU. The most harmless bad writing on the planet. Met with half-hearted "well done"s and worse, the eternal "meh".

Just goes to show that everything is backwards in 1984.

Don't have a history of picking fights with Comrade Ogilvy. You will have lost.

Nice. A few typos, but very nice. Written very similarly to Orwell's style :)

brilliant! very awesome- its style is so close to 1984... gotta love silent math class, morning announcements, elected companions and going to the motivator's office to get expelled and perhaps wiped off the face of the planet! as a fan-like person of Orwell's comunist "satires" i'd have to say you did a great job and to keep it up.

loved it- doubleplussgood!

That reminds me so much of the time I've spent in school that I am slightly disturbed. Weird.

WHOA! Creepy...I'd hate to go to that school...Nice intergration with 1984! Keep writing!

this is a really good fic... almost exactly like Orwell's 1984 would be... very freaky... glad im not in that school... not that im saying that my school's any better... with demented teachers, and perverted students.. well, it's better than the school in this story... keep writing!

Great job! I loved it! Could write another chapter about the late girl's punishment and what happened to her? And the false information that the schools are teaching the children? Just a suggestion..

looks nothing at all like my own high school (we're quite free to walk alone and talk in class), but I think you did a fine job of applying 1984's rigidness/horror.

Wow that was great. The only thing I would have done different was to have the girls think that an expelled girl was never there, had never been there, get my idea? But still this is definitly one of the better stories I have read on , the best so far on 1984! Good going and continue to write.

creepy creepy story, much like orwell's novel. fascinating parallels to my high school memories. kudos on a job well done.

Eeek! this reminds me of my school

*edges towards the door*

~ Brilliant writing!

This was a really good parallel. I'd like to see the idea expanded a bit, though. Having just graduated from high school, I have to say that this is like my high school but most like my middle school! We had these pride posters everywhere, and everything was oppressive. Once again, nice job!

Amazing. Simply amazing. You did an unbelievable job with this!

Thats scary. We are just reading 1984 for school and I wondered what a high school like that would be.

Excellent story! Best ending since Planet of the Apes! Great originality and creativity. You really show how the storyline of 1984 can take place in the system of education. Write more to it. I would love to read what happen next.